Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It is undeniable fact that, in this era technology is flourishing by leaps and bounds in each and every field. Nowadays, we no longer need to have pet kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed. In this piece of writing I will shed light on its and I agree along with my opinion in upcoming paragraphs.
To commence with the abundant reasons that's why technology is increase. Frist of all, this era technology is increase day by day. Every masses use a I Phone. All phone have a so many function, they saw all animal on the phone. This era, every people have no time and saw the zoo. Individuals are very busy life and they running to earn money and enjoy their life.
To more explain, after 10 years old time so many people saw the zoo, because old time so many kind birds and animals in the zoo but this time no many color birds and no big animals in zoo. That's why all people would not increase saw the zoos. When they want saw the zoo, they open the mobile app wildlife channels and saw the all big and short animals. Individuals do not waste their time and do not waste chunk of money. For instance, last year, the Canadian government conducted a survey, 70% people do not saw and increase the zoos.
To conclude, although there are many benifits of its, yet some disadvantags can never
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you state your position clearly, the arguments are underdeveloped and repetitive. For example, the point about using mobile apps to view animals is mentioned multiple times without being fully extended. Furthermore, the essay is incomplete, as the conclusion cuts off mid-sentence, preventing a full summary of your position. To improve, ensure you provide more detailed explanations for your arguments and reach the required length to allow for a comprehensive discussion of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay shows some attempt at paragraphing, but the logical progression is hindered by the incomplete nature of the text. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To commence with' and 'To conclude', but they are often used incorrectly or in a mechanical way. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'there are many benifits of its', where the pronoun 'its' does not clearly refer to a previous noun. The lack of a finished conclusion also disrupts the overall flow and structure of the argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You rely on basic phrasing, such as 'increase day by day' and 'saw the zoo', which lacks the precision required for higher bands. There are also noticeable errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'benifits' and 'disadvantags'. The use of 'Every masses' is grammatically incorrect and demonstrates a lack of control over collocations. To improve, try to incorporate a wider range of topic-specific vocabulary related to wildlife conservation and technology, and focus on using words in their correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'technology is increase' and 'every people have no time'. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'the abundant reasons that's why technology is increase'. Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that verbs are correctly conjugated and that articles are used appropriately before nouns.
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