Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-07-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays, some people said that zoos should be closed due to no need to have animals kept in zoos. I am strongly disagree with this notion and I will discuss the main reasons with examples in further paragraphs.

First of all, if zoos are closed then how we can preserve the species, which are distincting day by day. So, we can prevent from disappear the limited species with the help of zoos and it gives the right environment to the animals. For example, in 2019, in India, bengal tigers are going to be disappear then government start protecting the bengal tigers to put them into zoos to save them, and it was good thing for the animals, after that now it is increasing the numbers of animals. Therefore, zoos are the place where can preserve the animals.

Furthermore, zoos are the visiting place for the students and tourist to give them more information about animals specially about breeds. In addition, zoos also make the income for the society or government as well as help to developing the city or country. For instance, near my hometown, there is a zoo, which famous for the numerous type of animals, it help grow the town to become city and make the new small business near by such a

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, as it is only 215 words long. This significantly impacts the development of ideas, as the conclusion is missing and the final paragraph is incomplete. While you clearly state your position in the introduction, the arguments regarding conservation and economic benefits are under-developed. To improve, you must ensure you reach the word count by fully expanding on your points with more detailed explanations and examples, and always include a concluding paragraph that summarises your main arguments and restates your position.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay uses basic cohesive devices such as 'First of all', 'Furthermore', and 'In addition' to link ideas. However, the progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete nature of the final paragraph. Paragraphing is present, but the abrupt ending makes the overall structure feel unfinished. The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the sentence 'it help grow the town', where the antecedent is ambiguous. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of cohesive devices and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, logical conclusion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word choices, such as 'distincting day by day' instead of 'becoming extinct' and 'make the income' instead of 'generate revenue'. The range is somewhat limited, relying on repetitive structures. To improve, try to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to animal welfare and conservation, and focus on using collocations more accurately to express your ideas with greater sophistication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentences, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'I am strongly disagree' (should be 'I strongly disagree'), 'prevent from disappear' (should be 'prevent the disappearance of'), and 'bengal tigers are going to be disappear' (should be 'were disappearing'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and verb tense consistency. Reducing these frequent errors will significantly improve the readability and professional tone of your writing.

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