Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
One of our conspicuous trend of today's world is colossal upsurge in the number of people contending that, wild animals should live freely and the zoo needs to shut down. I am strongly agree with this notion because they also have right to live their live freely therefore; it can be harmful for general public. This essay will discuss both the agree and disagree points with my own opinion in conclusion.
To commence with, living life in prison is dreadful for big and wild animals. According to the recent report we are losing almost 41% of wild animals species. Moreover, lack of socialization of animals with wildlife can result loose mantle ability or genetical issue to get the birth to new generation. moreover, because of cage they are loosing their own skills such as peacock to fly or lion to rore
On the other hand, zoo are entertainment for kids which resulting good knowledge about the wildlife very closely. Additionally, this is a good source of income from tourism. Recent studies shows that more than 60% today's kids like to spend their holidays in the zoo rather than movie theater.
In the Conclusion, in order to save the rear wildlife species government should take action on it and promote the forest life.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you state a clear position, the arguments are underdeveloped. For instance, the point about animals losing 'mantle ability' or 'genetical issues' is vague and lacks sufficient explanation. Furthermore, the essay promises to discuss both sides but fails to provide a balanced argument or a clear synthesis in the conclusion. The conclusion is abrupt and does not effectively summarize the main points or restate your position in light of the arguments presented. To improve, ensure each body paragraph provides a clear topic sentence, supporting evidence, and a concluding thought.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. While you use some cohesive devices like 'To commence with' and 'On the other hand', the flow between sentences is often disjointed. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the link between 'lack of socialization' and 'genetical issue' is confusing. Paragraphing is present, but the final paragraph is very short and lacks the depth required to conclude the essay effectively. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph builds logically upon the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is somewhat limited and includes several inaccuracies that hinder precision. Phrases like 'conspicuous trend' and 'loose mantle ability' are used incorrectly or are non-standard. There are also spelling errors such as 'rore' instead of 'roar' and 'rear' instead of 'rare'. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'wildlife' and 'species', the overall range is insufficient to express complex ideas clearly. You should focus on learning collocations and ensuring that the words you choose are appropriate for the context of an academic or formal essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'One of our conspicuous trend' (should be 'trends'), 'I am strongly agree' (should be 'I strongly agree'), and 'zoo are entertainment' (should be 'zoos are'). Sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at complex sentences often contain errors in punctuation or syntax, such as the misuse of the semicolon after 'therefore'. To improve, practice subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and focus on constructing error-free complex sentences by using subordinating conjunctions correctly.
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