Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The infrastructure area are not allowed to build up the nature beauty of the mammals. It is permanentely banned for animals home. I am not supported to the this statement due to safe zone of wild pieases as well as herbivorous.
The first reason behind the not supporting this line due to the growing children. The kindergarten student need to physical learning experience towards the animals behaviors, living style, foods and their strong abilities. Secondly, the zoo is a secure area for the habitat organism. This organization maintain their healthy life with their diets, medical record and protected from the hunting activity. For instance, the every single living family are crucial for everyone's life.
On the other hand, the political parties are agree with this statement the reason behind that they save the space in the developed area. Moreover, they secure the budget to spend for theirs daily activities and employee pay cheque. Despite, the financial saving can used to growing the other industrial companies.
In conclusion, I strongly disagree with to destroyed the house of nature habitate due to the they tach to children the importance of nature and saved their life for unneccarey attcked from the peoples. Beside of this
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 202 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you state a clear position against closing zoos, the arguments provided—such as educational benefits for children and animal protection—are underdeveloped and lack sufficient detail or illustrative examples. The points regarding political parties are somewhat tangential and not clearly linked to the core argument. To improve, you must expand your points with more depth and ensure the response meets the length requirement to allow for a full exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression of ideas is often hindered by unclear phrasing and awkward transitions. For example, the transition 'Despite, the financial saving can used to growing...' is grammatically confusing and fails to connect the ideas effectively. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often misused or mechanical, such as 'Beside of this' at the end of the text, which is an incomplete sentence. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus will help improve the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'nature beauty of the mammals', 'habitat organism', and 'unneccarey attcked'. These errors sometimes make it difficult for the reader to follow your intended meaning. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to use more sophisticated or precise terms. To achieve a higher band, you should focus on learning collocations (words that naturally go together) and proofreading for spelling errors, such as 'permanentely' and 'habitate'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The infrastructure area are not allowed'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'I am not supported to the this statement'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack the necessary complexity expected at higher levels. Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that you are using the correct tense and word order before attempting more complex structures.
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