Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays species are more extinction owing to, they do not have the proper pace where species or animals can live and be more safe. I am completely disagree with this statement that zoos should be closed. I will explain more deeply this statement relevant points in the upcoming paragraphs.
The main is harmful impact on society. To be more precise, if zoos will be closed where animals or others species will live. They usually find the place to hide their self Even they will also harm the human-being if they will not kept in zoos. As some one animals are very dangerous for the folks. Lion and tiger are the good example. Even street dogs are also be the part of this issue.
Moreover, zoos is also the toursist attraction. If it will no more how people will come form the different cities or countries to watch their favourite birds or species. In addition, by this government economy will also affected. The other advantage is animals are also help to make many medicine. For instance, due to covid time, by rat blood research made the vaccination to control this disease.
To conclude, I think rather than close the zoos, if government duties to do some inspection and caught the animals are keep in zoos. As they are harmful and also useful for the environment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you clearly state your position, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting evidence. For example, the point about medical research is mentioned but not explained in a way that connects logically to the necessity of zoos. The ideas are repetitive, and the conclusion does not effectively summarize the main points. To improve, you must expand on your arguments with specific examples and ensure you meet the length requirement to allow for full development of your position.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often unclear. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'To conclude', they are sometimes used incorrectly or in a way that feels mechanical. The referencing is occasionally confusing, such as in the second paragraph where the connection between closing zoos and the danger of street dogs is not clearly established. The flow between sentences is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors, which makes the text difficult to follow at times. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus will help improve coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'harmful', 'good', and 'place', which restricts your ability to express complex ideas. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'proper pace' instead of 'proper environment' and 'caught the animals are keep in zoos'. Some phrases are also non-standard, such as 'hide their self' instead of 'hide themselves'. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to animal welfare and conservation, and practice using these words in correct, natural contexts.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'zoos is also', 'government economy will also affected'), incorrect verb tenses, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, making the writing feel disjointed. For instance, 'Nowadays species are more extinction owing to, they do not have...' is grammatically incorrect and confusing. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be a good starting point for improvement.
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