Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this era animals play vital role in society. we should protect them as we can. It is very help and important for human life. animal give us many things to survive our life. I firmly agree with zoos should be closed. I will explain with appropriate example.

I am certain agree with the animal zoos should be closed. authority should take some strict rules for it. because, animals are not feel comfortable as compare forest. consequently, many animal die in zoo. also, there is many tourist visiting in zoo hence, chance to spread disease. animal need natural air and hunting food. moreover, animal does not like to live in cage.

In my perspective, government should take some rules for the forest. people do not cut the forest land and make building or other thinks to deteriorate the forest. Moreover, in zoo staff some time take money and do business for animal nail or animal skin. Hence, all the animal have freedom to live a life. human do not have right to control animal.

On the other hands, zoo is good for the animal. For instance, if some animal is old or sick. zoo is best for them. they can provide them food and medication.also, zoo provide some doctor to tack care for the animal.

In conclusion, In my perspective, zoos should be closed for the world. there is animal feel not comfort like forest. also zoo is good for the week or old age animal to survive their life with peace.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position, although the argument is somewhat contradictory. You argue that zoos should be closed, but then include a paragraph discussing the benefits of zoos for sick or elderly animals. This inconsistency weakens your position. While you provide some reasons for your stance, such as animal welfare and disease concerns, the development is limited. The ideas are often stated rather than fully extended with detailed examples or logical reasoning. To improve, ensure your position remains consistent throughout the essay and provide more depth for each supporting point to better meet the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by disjointed sentences and repetitive transitions. You use cohesive devices like 'consequently', 'moreover', and 'hence', but they are often used incorrectly or in a mechanical way that does not improve the flow of the argument. For example, the transition between the argument against zoos and the paragraph acknowledging their benefits is abrupt and confusing. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph focuses on a single, clear idea would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to express complex ideas. You rely on simple words like 'good', 'things', and 'take', which lack the precision required for a higher band score. There are also frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'I am certain agree' instead of 'I certainly agree' and 'tack care' instead of 'take care'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of topic-specific vocabulary related to animal welfare and conservation, and focus on using words in their correct grammatical context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'animal die', 'animal does not like'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple or fragmented, and there is a lack of complex structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with frequent misuse of full stops and commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that sentences are complete thoughts rather than fragments. Practicing the use of complex sentences with correct conjunctions will also help improve your range.

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