Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In this modern era ,there are many zoos in every part of world . Animals are not required to keep in zoos longer , that is why zoos should not open . I am totally agree with the given statement because of few factors , which will be explained in following paragraphs .
To start with , zoos are disturbing the nature of animals . Animals lose their freedom while keeping in zoos . Because animals species are good be in nature , so their they have rights of their life . For example , animals can find their food by their own in nature . That is common for them . Moreover, they enjoy to have own choice of food , rather than given food by zoos . It would reduce their mental stress , which they have in lockers .
Another factor is that animals have shorten quality of life in zoos . When they are living in lockers , so they are getting weaker physically , then they are not having good and long life . For example , animals have very small space in zoos , so that they do not have much choice to move . And , they lose their pride of territory , that they used to have in wild life . It disturbs their well being .
In conclusion , animals have their own life and they being to have their life in wild . Zoos can disturbers their life span . That is why , zoos should not open , this action allows animals to have quality of life .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of closing zoos. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention that animals lose their freedom and have shorter lifespans, these points are repetitive and lack depth. For instance, the argument about 'lockers' (cages) is mentioned in both body paragraphs without adding new dimensions or nuanced evidence. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your points with more specific examples or counter-arguments, such as the role of zoos in conservation or education, and then refute them to strengthen your position.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use basic cohesive devices like 'To start with', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the use of referencing is occasionally unclear. For example, the phrase 'that is why' is used repeatedly, which makes the writing feel repetitive. To improve, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your sentences connect more naturally to one another rather than relying on simple transitions.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite basic and repetitive. You use words like 'animals', 'life', and 'zoos' very frequently. There are also some inaccuracies in word choice, such as using 'lockers' to describe animal enclosures, which is not the correct term in this context. To improve, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'habitats', 'captivity', 'welfare', or 'endangered species', and avoid repeating the same nouns and verbs throughout the essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity, such as 'Animals are not required to keep in zoos' (should be passive: 'are not required to be kept') and 'they being to have their life'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly the use of passive voice and subject-verb agreement, and ensure that your complex sentences are grammatically sound.
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