Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The majority of people think that animals which are kept in the zoos must be released and closed permanently. I completely agree with this statement because this helps animals to stay with freedom, healthy and without losing their natural habitant in wildlife sancturies or jungles.

To begin with, zoos help people and children to observe them careful which enhance their knowledge about wildlife. However this iniciative, takes all the freedom from wild animals and force them to stay in the small cages due to which animals especially tiger becomes aggresive and directly impacted their health. For instance, when peple rome near the cages sometimes increases animals stress as they make faces and does some irrelevant things. Additionally, artifical environment created for animals are small which leave them less space or equivalent to no space, makes them physically unfit results in less lifespan.

Furthermore, keeping wild animals in wildlife sancturies rather than in the zoo helps them to stay with their natural habits such as hunting their prey. On the other hand, zoos provide them limited food leaves animal hungry. The wildlife sancturies are always bigger and similar as jungles which helps them to rome freely without any danger. For example, children and parents can also have the advantages to experience the real reality of how animal survive in jungle and arrange their food.

From my perspective, without any doubt, zoos must be closed, released and returned to jungle. Likewise humans, animals must be left freely to live their life without any human involvement.

To conclude, wildlife sancturies must be created to give animals a new life away from city center with will not impact their freedom as well as natural habits

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of closing zoos. However, the development of ideas is somewhat inconsistent. While you provide reasons such as animal welfare and the benefits of wildlife sanctuaries, some points are repetitive or lack depth. For instance, the argument about children observing animals is mentioned in both the second and third paragraphs without significant expansion. To reach a higher band, ensure that each paragraph introduces a distinct, well-supported point rather than circling back to similar concepts. The conclusion is also slightly repetitive, restating the main point without adding a final synthesis of the argument.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', and 'On the other hand' to link your points. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly misused, such as 'However this iniciative, takes all the freedom'. Additionally, some sentences lack smooth transitions, making the flow feel a bit disjointed. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents would enhance the overall cohesion of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'wildlife sanctuaries', 'natural habitat', and 'aggressive'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and spelling mistakes that occasionally impede the reader, such as 'iniciative' (initiative), 'peple rome' (people roam), and 'artifical' (artificial). Some phrasing is also unnatural, such as 'real reality' or 'does some irrelevant things'. To improve, focus on learning the correct collocations for common academic topics and proofreading for basic spelling errors, which will help you convey your ideas with greater precision and sophistication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('animals especially tiger becomes aggresive'), article usage ('the zoos', 'the wildlife sancturies'), and awkward sentence construction ('which leave them less space or equivalent to no space, makes them physically unfit'). While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and punctuation prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence structure and ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects will significantly improve your accuracy.

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