Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Zoos have existed for many years, to giving opportunity to many people to see wild animals and grab some knowledge about them. Some people believe that, zoos should be closed and leave them in natural habitat.
First and foremost point, having zoos providing education about different kind of species and we can see every animal there without visiting to another countries. However, It also protects the endangered species from wildfire and natural disasters. It gives freely environment to animals for breeding. For instance, the Arabian oryx is the endangered species which is protected by zoos.
On the other hand, there is no need to closed the zoos. Government should make proper rules and give accurate budget to administration to take care of the animals.
Admittedly, zoos provide us chance to see varieties of animals and birds. Moreover, It is best way for students to collect data about any particular rare species or scientific researches about wild animals.
To conclude, zoos are important for an animals which gives them safe place to live without any danger.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 175 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you present a position, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack sufficient depth or supporting detail. For example, the mention of the Arabian oryx is a good start, but it is not expanded upon to fully support your argument. To improve, you must ensure you write at least 250 words to allow for a more thorough exploration of your points, ensuring each paragraph contains a clear topic sentence followed by detailed explanation and relevant examples.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. While you use some cohesive devices like 'First and foremost' and 'On the other hand', the transitions between ideas are sometimes abrupt or repetitive. For instance, the paragraphing is inconsistent, and the concluding sentence does not effectively summarize the main arguments presented. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that flows naturally into the next. Improving the structure of your introduction and conclusion will also help provide a more coherent framework for your arguments.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for basic communication but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on simple phrasing, such as 'grab some knowledge' and 'give freely environment', which are not natural collocations. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'wildfire' instead of 'wildlife' or 'natural threats'. To improve, try to incorporate more academic vocabulary and precise collocations. Focus on learning how words are used in context rather than just memorizing individual terms. Expanding your range will help you express your ideas with more sophistication and clarity.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'to giving opportunity', 'visiting to another countries', and 'no need to closed the zoos'. Your sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. When you do attempt more complex structures, errors in verb tense and preposition usage often occur. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of infinitives. Proofreading for common errors like article usage and pluralization will also significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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