Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

When the question of zoo arises, some are of claim that zoo services should be shut down as they are against of caging animals in such areas. I completely oppose the viewpoint. My inclination is justified further.

The foremost argument I would like to put forward to support my inclination is that such animal showcase facilities are important for new generation. Nowadays, it is uncommon to see animals roaming on human residential area. So, upcoming generation has only option to explore other species are conservative facilities. For example, almost every kids born in 21st century have witnessed wild animals only in a zoo. Furthermore, encaged animals are the most secure way of witnessing wildlife. It is to say that Lion, Tiger and other animals can not fearlessly be observed in forest or any of their habitat. Therefore, it is better to have a animal prison to deter individuals to risk their life just to visit them.

Besides, such facilities generate significant revenue and also paying higher taxes. If they are out of business, natios' economy may suffer. Hence, zoos and other related companies should be preserved to avoid any economic recession. For instance, Thailands' tourism industry highly rely upon people visiting zoos from all around the world.

However, some are of them in favour of closing down all zooes. It is just because of they are being emotional and also think that animals are being harrased by keeping away from their natural habitat. But they are all well taken care of by staff including proper feeding to medical assistance.

In conclusion, although some people showing sympathy to imprisoned animals in a zoo, conservative areas provide knowledge about wildlife as well as keep contrys' economy viable. It also provide secure systems for humans to observe without putting their life at risk. It is suggested to authorities to investigate the condition sof the animals kept in a zoo.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. You have provided relevant arguments, such as the educational value of zoos and their economic impact. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the point about economic recession is asserted rather than fully explained with a logical link to the closure of zoos. The argument regarding animal welfare is also slightly superficial. To reach a higher band, ensure that each supporting point is fully explored with more depth and specific, logical reasoning rather than just stating the ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear central topic. You use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore', 'Besides', and 'In conclusion' to link ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'It is to say that' or 'It is just because of they are being emotional'. Additionally, some referencing is unclear, such as 'some are of them' in the fourth paragraph. Improving the flow between sentences and using a wider variety of linking words would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, including terms like 'residential area', 'wildlife', and 'economic recession'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'some are of claim', 'conservative facilities' (likely meaning 'conservation'), and 'natios' economy'. Spelling errors like 'zooes', 'contrys', and 'condition sof' also occur. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they indicate a need for more precise vocabulary usage and careful proofreading to ensure accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, they often contain grammatical errors, such as 'some are of claim that zoo services should be shut down as they are against of caging animals'. There are frequent errors in articles ('the question of zoo', 'in a zoo'), prepositions, and subject-verb agreement ('some people showing sympathy'). While these errors rarely impede communication, they are frequent enough to limit the score. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring consistent use of articles and correct verb forms.

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