Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Zoos are considered as the shelter of animals and birds, However some think that animals should not be preserved in the zoos and zoos should be closed. i personally disagree with the given statement as i believe that animals must be kept in the zoos, because of conservation and research and for education and awareness, which can be gained profoundly by vising in zoos than vising on online platforms.

To embark upon, modern zoos breed endangered species to prevent extinction and fund wildlife research. To elaborate it, many of the animal species are at the edge of extinction and can solely be preserved by providing specific bred in controlled environment and given better treatment and then if possible, reintroduce then in their natural habitat. To exemplify, in America, through captive breeding program, many for the species such as California condor and Arabian oryx are saved from extinction, which proved advantageous not only for the wildlife but the country as a whole. Thus, America attracts thousands of visitors and researchers who bring more unknown phenomenon of wildlife habitat and endangered species, which proves beneficial for the one who want to have more knowledge about it.

Moreover, keeping the zoos open is fruitful for young minds to explore more and remember i for later life. to explain it, many school trips are organized by the authorities to educate students about wildlife species, which is an incredible way to provide them deeper knowledge.

As a result , learners not only get the opportunity to see the animals from history but also grasps and relate more information provides by the tutor, however, in this technological era, one can easily find the relatable information from any search engine but most of the platforms do not provide the actual information and their picture to have a better understanding. Which is why, it becomes hard for a student to gat the actual knowledge than assumed one.

In conclusion, although keeping the zoos open could be beneficial for some cases like their treatment in cages was difficult, however, the modern zoos have evolved into essential centers for wildlife preservation, where the give better treatment and help saving the wildlife species from extinction.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses all parts of the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. The arguments regarding conservation, research, and education are relevant and supported with examples, such as the mention of the California condor and Arabian oryx. However, the development of ideas is sometimes hindered by imprecise phrasing, such as 'bring more unknown phenomenon of wildlife habitat'. While the position is consistent, the explanation of why zoos are superior to online platforms could be more nuanced to reach a higher band. Overall, the response is well-focused on the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, each with a clear central topic. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To embark upon', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion', though some transitions feel slightly mechanical or forced. Referencing is generally clear, but there are instances where the flow is interrupted by awkward phrasing, such as the transition between the discussion of school trips and the comparison with online platforms. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, which helps the reader follow the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, with some attempts at less common items like 'extinction', 'captive breeding', and 'advantageous'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'shelter of animals' instead of 'sanctuary', 'vising' instead of 'visiting', and 'gat the actual knowledge' instead of 'gain'. While these errors do not impede communication, they demonstrate a limited range of sophisticated vocabulary. The student needs to focus on more natural collocations and precise terminology to improve this score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the zoos'), subject-verb agreement ('they give better treatment'), and punctuation (missing commas, incorrect capitalization of 'i'). Some sentences are structurally awkward, such as 'Which is why, it becomes hard for a student to gat the actual knowledge than assumed one.' While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. More attention to basic grammar rules and proofreading is required.

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