Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Maintaining the ecosystem cycle is necessary in order to balance the ecology. It is debatable issue weather animals should be kept in zoos or not. I will define my points in subsequent paragraphs before reaching to my decision.
Firstly, nobody like to live in boundary either its animal or humans, every living creatures have to be a freedom to live freely where they want such as animals in forestry area. Another, reasons why should not kept in zoos is that it impacts on their life. Mostly the animals in forest area are depending on each other for their livilhood or nurishment. Moreover, the animals those kept in zoos are depending on humans for their feed, which weaken their mental and physical streanth to hunt and survive.
However, for the extit spices zoos are required for their breeding and to look after from the preditators. For instance, In Indian there is afrcian sufary, where the white tiger are reared for their last extint stage. Along with this, Zoos also working as income resource for some countries and promote a tourism which further help to generate income or learning the culture of different nations.
In conclusion, animals should have to be freely lived in forest areas for the better development and ecole
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you present a position, the arguments are underdeveloped and the conclusion is incomplete, cutting off mid-sentence. You address the prompt by discussing both sides, but the lack of depth and the failure to complete the essay prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure you fully expand on your points with specific examples and provide a clear, finished conclusion that restates your position.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and limited use of cohesive devices. While you use transition words like 'Firstly' and 'However', the connections between sentences are occasionally mechanical. The incomplete final paragraph also disrupts the overall coherence of the response. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring all paragraphs are fully developed will help create a more logical and cohesive argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for basic communication but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several spelling errors, such as 'weather' instead of 'whether', 'livilhood', 'nurishment', 'streanth', 'extit', 'spices', and 'preditators'. These errors are frequent and occasionally distract the reader. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic terms and try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to the topic of animal welfare and conservation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Examples include 'nobody like to live' (subject-verb agreement), 'every living creatures have to be a freedom' (incorrect phrasing), and 'animals those kept in zoos' (relative clause error). Punctuation is also inconsistent. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction limit the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct sentence formation will be key to improving your accuracy.
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