Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

I disagree that, We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoo should be closed, because we are profitable, kids and the adults are love seeing those animals, for example the people seeing the different animals like lions, tigers, girraffe’s, elephants, and other mammals, the peoples are always amaze so we dont need to closed the zoo, and also you know that i have a son he is 1 year old, and i would love to go in the zoo with him to make him see those reals animals and predators

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, as it is only 94 words long. Consequently, the ideas are severely underdeveloped and lack the necessary depth and supporting evidence required for an IELTS Task 2 essay. While you clearly state your disagreement with the prompt, the argument is limited to a single, brief paragraph focusing only on the entertainment value of zoos. To achieve a higher score, you must expand your response by exploring multiple perspectives, providing detailed examples, and ensuring the essay is structured with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is written as a single, long, run-on sentence rather than a structured essay. There is a lack of paragraphing, which is essential for organizing ideas logically. Cohesive devices are largely absent, and the flow of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow your argument. To improve, you should organize your response into distinct paragraphs—an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion—and use linking words such as 'furthermore,' 'consequently,' or 'in contrast' to connect your ideas more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, such as the repeated use of 'animals' and 'zoo.' There are also errors in word form and usage, such as 'the peoples are always amaze' instead of 'people are always amazed.' The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas or arguments. To improve, you should aim to use a wider variety of topic-specific vocabulary related to wildlife conservation, education, and animal welfare, and ensure you use the correct word forms in your sentences.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response consists of a single, grammatically incorrect run-on sentence. There are frequent errors in punctuation, such as unnecessary commas and the misuse of apostrophes (e.g., 'girraffe’s'). Subject-verb agreement is also problematic, as seen in 'kids and the adults are love seeing.' The lack of complex sentence structures significantly limits your score. To improve, focus on writing shorter, grammatically complete sentences and practice using a mix of simple and complex structures, ensuring that you use correct verb tenses and punctuation throughout your writing.

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