Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Public places like zoos is

Nowadays , some people think we no longer need to have animals kept in zoos , so zoos should be closed. I completely disagree with this statement because zoos provide several benefits to individuals and animals also.

To begin with , there are a number of points which explain the importance of zoos for today's era. The primary one is that places like zoos act as a protective and safe place for those species whose are close to extint . To explicate it, places like animal parks act as a safe place for some rare species because they have a expert team members who take care of those species by giving them special treatment, good quality of feed and best environment for their comfortability.

Secondly, apart from animal care wildlife park help economy to boost because it is a tourist place for their nations. Furthermore, beside the care of animals zoos also provide different type of services like a water park, cafe and restaurant due to those facilities it helpful for individuals by providing them jobs. For example, according to the database of one wildlife park in Australia it provides jobs to 17000 people.

In conclusion, I am fully disagree with upper mentioned trend since by zoos individuals get a lot of benefits and it is helpful for economy to rise by provide jobs and act as a tourist place. So , it should not be closed .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position against closing zoos. However, the essay is under the 250-word minimum, which limits the depth of development. While the ideas regarding conservation and economic benefits are relevant, they are somewhat under-developed. The argument about 'water parks' and 'cafes' is a bit tangential to the core debate about animal welfare. To improve, you should expand on your points with more specific examples or deeper analysis to ensure the response is fully developed and meets the length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. You use basic cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'Secondly', and 'Furthermore' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel repetitive. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'due to those facilities it helpful for individuals', where the grammatical structure disrupts the logical flow. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring each sentence clearly connects to the previous one will help you achieve a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You use some basic errors in word choice, such as 'comfortability' (instead of 'comfort') and 'extint' (spelling error). Phrases like 'upper mentioned trend' are unnatural in this context. While you attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'species' and 'wildlife park', the overall range is limited. To improve, focus on using more sophisticated collocations and ensuring accurate word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'whose are close to extint', 'a expert team members', and 'I am fully disagree'. Subject-verb agreement and article usage are inconsistent throughout the text. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents a higher score. You should focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that complex sentences are constructed accurately.

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