Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Undoubtedly, places like zoos and sanctuaries are constructed to keep the animals safe. In zoos, fauna will be taken care of more as compared to if they were left alone themselves. If the zoos were closed permanently then where would these creatures go and it would also disturbed economy of the country. I disagree with this notion, and the following paragraphs will explain my points of disagreement.

Firstly, if such places are closed, then where would animals go, and who would give them food, water, and medicine? As a result, large animals will eat small animals, consequently this would affect the food chain. If zoos are not present, then how animals could be treated if they have any disease? In MacDonald Zoo, a team of doctors come every quarter to do a regular check-up so that animals would not suffer if they have any ailments.

Furthermore, this shift would also have a negative impact on the economy of the country. There is an entry fee for all the zoos and a country earns profit from this ticket money, which they further use in the development of the zoos itself. McNeil zoo in Montreal reported that every year they earn hundred million dollar by just the entry fees.

In conclusion, zoos should not be closed because it is considered as a safe place for various animals. Regular checkups are conducted from time to time to ensure that they are not suffering from any kind of disease. Moreover, zoos also contribute towards the econony development of the country.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.0
Coherence and Cohesion6.0
Lexical Resource6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy6.0
Overall6.0

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The student addresses the task by clearly taking a position against the closure of zoos and providing reasons to support this stance. The response covers key areas such as animal welfare, the food chain, and economic impacts, fulfilling the requirements for Task Achievement at a Band 6 level. Ideas are presented, but some are slightly under-developed or rely on broad generalisations, such as the claim that large animals eating small animals would disrupt the food chain in the wild if zoos closed. The mention of specific examples like MacDonald Zoo and McNeil Zoo adds some support, though the arguments could be extended further for a higher band. Overall, the position is clear throughout, and the main parts of the prompt are addressed adequately.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay presents a coherent overall arrangement with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct points, such as animal care and economic benefits. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or faulty, as seen in repetitive transitional phrases and sentence linkages like 'if such places are closed, then where would animals go, and who would give them food...?' Referencing is generally clear, but the logical progression between sentences occasionally feels abrupt. While basic cohesive devices are present, they lack the flexibility and smooth flow required for higher band levels.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common words and phrases such as 'sanctuaries', 'sanctuary', and 'contribute towards the econony development'. However, there are noticeable word-choice and spelling inaccuracies, such as 'disturbed' instead of 'disturb', 'fauna' used slightly unnaturally to mean individual animals, and 'econony' instead of 'economy'. Despite these errors, communication is not impeded, and the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the writer's arguments, fitting the Band 6 descriptor well.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional structures and relative clauses. However, there are frequent grammatical errors in tense consistency, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'how animals could be treated if they have any disease' and 'hundred million dollar by just the entry fees'. Punctuation is generally acceptable, but structural inaccuracies persist, particularly in complex questions and conditional clauses. These errors occasionally cause slight awkwardness for the reader, but they rarely impede overall communication, placing the response securely in Band 5.5 to 6.0.

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