Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

## INTRODUCTION

Nowadays, **[TOPIC]** is an important issue in society. People have different views about this matter. **[STATE THE QUESTION IN YOUR OWN WORDS]**. In my opinion, **[YOUR CLEAR OPINION, IF REQUIRED]**. This essay will discuss the main points related to this issue.

## BODY PARAGRAPH 1

Firstly, **[MAIN IDEA 1]**. The main reason is that **[REASON]**. This means that **[EXPLANATION]**. For example, **[SPECIFIC EXAMPLE RELATED TO THE QUESTION]**. This example shows that **[EXPLAIN WHAT THE EXAMPLE PROVES]**. As a result, **[RESULT/EFFECT]**. Therefore, **[CONNECT BACK TO THE QUESTION]**.

## BODY PARAGRAPH 2

Secondly, **[MAIN IDEA 2]**. One reason for this is **[REASON]**. In addition, **[EXPLANATION OR SUPPORTING DETAIL]**. For instance, **[SPECIFIC EXAMPLE RELATED TO THE QUESTION]**. This can lead to **[RESULT/EFFECT]**. Therefore, **[CONNECT BACK TO THE QUESTION]**. For this reason, **[SHORT FINAL POINT ABOUT THE IDEA]**.

## CONCLUSION

In conclusion, **[SUMMARISE MAIN IDEA 1]** and **[SUMMARISE MAIN IDEA 2]** are important points regarding this issue. Based on these points, I believe that **[CLEAR FINAL OPINION, IF REQUIRED]**. Overall, **[DIRECT ANSWER TO THE QUESTION]**.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is heavily template-based and fails to properly engage with the topic of whether zoos should be closed. Crucially, the length requirement is NOT met, as the student's response contains only 173 words, falling well short of the 250-word minimum. This severely limits the development of ideas. Because the student only filled in bracketed placeholders with generic labels like '[MAIN IDEA 1]' rather than generating actual arguments, the task is addressed only minimally and tangentially, corresponding to a Band 4.0 level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text is structured logically into standard paragraph formats following a typical essay skeleton. Transition phrases such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion' are used to signal the progression of ideas. However, because the text consists entirely of structural templates and placeholders rather than actual coherent arguments, the information cannot be truly arranged coherently as a meaningful text. Referencing is largely absent beyond generic formulas. This places the text at a Band 4.0 for Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The student uses very basic, repetitive vocabulary confined entirely to meta-language and structural connectors such as 'Nowadays', 'society', 'important issue', 'discuss', and 'conclusion'. There is no attempt to use less common lexical items related to the actual topic of animal welfare or zoos. While there are no spelling errors in the boilerplate text, the resource is extremely limited and repetitive, which is indicative of a Band 4.0 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical structures used in the template are simple and repetitive, relying on fixed frames such as 'People have different views about this matter' and 'In my opinion, [YOUR CLEAR OPINION, IF REQUIRED].' While the syntax within the formulaic sentences is mostly accurate, the total lack of genuine student-generated complex sentences and the reliance on instructional placeholders restricts the grammatical range severely. This warrants a Band 4.0.

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