Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

An opinion has it that there is no need to be keeping animals in zoos, that zoos should be clossed. Completely, I disagree with the opinion because the arguement is awkwardly backdating and mightb end up cutting the expextationmd of the upcoming generations.

We all know that zoo is where varieties ofllive wild animals are kept in enclosures where the puplic can view, study and learn about them. On the othere hand, if there is no longer existence of zoo, obviously, this peoples knowledge and expecttion has been cut short.

Additionaly, keeping of zoos in a particular vicinity is on its own another form of creating employment to the masses because zoos dont keepthemselves, there must be zoo keepers that sees to the daily running and care of the zoo. Keeping of zoos contributes to the develpoment of the community becuse that will be attracting tourists to that community while the revenue acrued from it will be contributing to the upliftment of the community and the masses as well.

Zoo keeping helps in war againstb eradication of some speciesof wild animals. As they are being kept in the zoo, it gives room for multiplication keepinh them from goin into extinct.

Remembering my days in the collage, my experience at the zoo offered my collague and I more insight on wild animals. Seeing them life pl;us some tips on their way of life given by the zoo keepers. The experience gives clearer view and understanding on them.

Lastly,the important of zoo keeping and their efects on the lives of the masses should not be underrated and a such, it is very necessary that zoos should be keep and maintained in the society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The student addresses the prompt directly by taking a clear stance against closing zoos and provides several reasons to support this view, including educational benefits, employment creation, community development, and species conservation. Ideas are introduced and supported with personal reasoning and experiences, such as memories from college. However, the development of these ideas remains somewhat superficial and lacks specific external examples or deeper elaboration, which places the response securely in the Band 6 category. The position is clear throughout, and the main arguments are relevant to the general topic, fulfilling the core requirements of task response satisfactorily.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a recognisable introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is utilised to separate distinct ideas, such as educational value versus economic benefits. However, cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or awkward, as seen in transitions like 'Additionaly' and 'Lastly,the important'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and repetitive structures in transitions hinder smooth progression. Paragraph breaks are present, but internal cohesion within paragraphs can be disjointed due to phrasing issues. Overall, the organisation meets the criteria for Band 5.0 as there is some logical progression, but cohesive links are often faulty or inadequate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The student attempts a range of vocabulary suitable for the topic, including words like 'multiplication', 'extinct', 'communities', and 'tourists'. However, there are numerous spelling errors and lexical inaccuracies throughout the text, such as 'clossed', 'arguement', 'expextationmd', 'llive', 'puplic', 'acrued', 'keepinh', 'goin', 'collage', 'collague', 'efects', and 'keep'. These errors occasionally cause strain for the reader. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic meaning, the frequency of spelling mistakes and awkward word choices prevents the response from reaching Band 6.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some control over basic sentence structures. However, grammatical accuracy is weak, with frequent errors including missing articles, subject-verb agreement issues, and awkward phrasing such as 'An opinion has it that', 'zoo is where varieties ofllive wild animals are kept', 'this peoples knowledge', and 'zoos should be keep'. Punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after commas and periods, are also prevalent. Although the meaning can generally be understood, the high frequency of grammatical and mechanical errors places this response at Band 5.0.

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