Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

INTRODUCTION-So we discussed that we really need our animals kept in zoo or not accourding to my opinion that we need our animals in zoo for protecting the wild life and rare species and you can see differnt types of birds,wild life and animals so fully agree for we need to kept open ur zoo

i want share of experince in zoo recently i had with my family during my recently visit bramprton zoo i saw various types pf species that i experice with it. i learned lots of things saw the diifernt types of animals that i never saw in my life it is really great experice for me and family

Acoording to my opinion zoo is perfect place that thers is seen lots of species that you never sawn on naturaly its also kept safe our animals for future reserches and develop lots of differnt types species so that way zoo is is perfect places to kept or animals safely and healty.

In conculision that we diffnataly kept open zoo for you learn and studies. i strongly faith that you learn lots and knowledge saw the animals also this really good entertament when we are vsit zoo with our family

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response responds to the task only minimally and fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 250 words, containing only 202 words. While a position is stated indicating full agreement that zoos should remain open for protecting wildlife and rare species, the ideas remain limited and under-developed. For instance, the mention of visiting the Brampton zoo provides a personal anecdote, but it is not sufficiently extended or supported with deeper reasoning. The arguments regarding future research and education are briefly touched upon in the third and fourth paragraphs, but they lack the depth and expansion expected for a fully realized academic essay. To reach a higher level, the writer would need to expand significantly on each point with well-developed supporting arguments and ensure the length requirement is fully met.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organization present in the text, moving from an introduction to personal experience, reasoning, and a conclusion. However, there is no clear overall progression of ideas, and paragraphing is informal and disrupted by labeling headers such as 'INTRODUCTION-'. Cohesive devices are generally inadequate, repetitive, or inaccurate, relying heavily on simple connectors like 'and' or repetitive phrasing such as 'according to my opinion'. Reference pronouns are sometimes unclear, which disrupts the flow of the text. To improve coherence and cohesion, the writer needs to utilize a wider and more accurate range of cohesive devices, establish clear logical links between sentences, and organize the essay into standard, properly structured paragraphs without informal labels.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, which strains the reader's comprehension at times. There are noticeable lexical errors throughout the text, including spelling errors such as 'accourding', 'differnt', 'bramprton', 'experice', 'diifernt', 'reserches', 'conculision', 'diffnataly', 'entertament', and 'vsit'. Word choice and word formation are also frequently inaccurate, such as using 'kept open ur zoo' or 'strongly faith'. The range of vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey a basic opinion, but frequent spelling and word-choice errors prevent the response from achieving a higher score. To improve lexical resource, the student should expand their working vocabulary, learn correct word forms, and pay closer attention to spelling and standard collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, relying primarily on simple sentence structures and faulty attempts at complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, articles, plurals, and prepositions within grammatical patterns. Examples of these errors include 'we really need our animals kept in zoo', 'i want share of experince', 'saw lots of species that you never sawn on naturaly', and 'zoo is perfect places to kept or animals safely and healty'. Punctuation is also weak, with missing commas and run-on sentences. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader. To achieve a higher band, the writer must demonstrate a better control of basic grammar, improve sentence structures, and reduce the frequency of errors across verbs, articles, and word forms.

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