Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

"The topic illustrates zoo.There are many cities where zoo present.There are many types of animals which are Elephant,Lions,Graphas and Pandas.Morever there are many countries where many animals die,Because some times they dont have to care animals and they dont have to feed them.On the other hand many people thinks that animals kepts in zoos is no longer needed.However zoo is a place where many animals is placed.And many children and families are enjoyed with each other.For example:Pandas are moving in some other countries,So pandas are not live longer.So there are many other animals like lion has replaced to other animals.But Many children are felling happy,when they are in zoo.There are many families which come in zoo from another cities.They are felling amazing and pretty.A lahore zoo is the best example where many people was saw zoo from very far places.Zoo should not be closed,because its a good and wonderful place.Finally,there are several other reasons of animal kept in zoos which are Some animals like lion is a danger animal,so they attacked to other children and many other people.Its a incident in a city that a lion eat a children,Their family want to prevent children,But their efforts become hopeless.So mostly people are afriad of Lions,because its a animal which sometimes eaten a person.But elephant is a good animal.Many children are enjoying on the sitting of elephant.They are feeling so much excited.The conclusion is that animals kept in zoos should be closed,This was not a permanent solution.i dont agree this,because some animals were still remaining in zoo.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You do state a position—“Zoo should not be closed”—and give some relevant reasons, including that zoos attract families and that certain animals may be dangerous. However, the response only minimally addresses the central question of whether zoos are still needed. Several points are unclear or contradictory: you mention animals dying through poor care, then argue for keeping zoos, and the conclusion says both that zoos “should be closed” and “i dont agree this.” Examples such as the Lahore zoo and the lion incident are introduced but not explained enough to support your view. Make your position consistent, select two or three relevant reasons, and explain how each supports your answer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is an attempt to move from general comments about zoos to reasons for keeping them, with linking phrases such as “On the other hand,” “However,” and “Finally.” These signals show an awareness of how ideas can be connected. However, the response is presented as one continuous paragraph, and the sequence of points is difficult to follow: animal welfare, family enjoyment, pandas, and danger from lions appear without clear grouping or progression. Some links also create confusing relationships, especially the contrast between the claim that animals die in zoos and the later support for zoos. Use separate paragraphs for your position, each main reason, and the conclusion, and connect ideas according to their actual relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “animals,” “families,” “danger,” and “solution,” and attempt phrases such as “permanent solution.” This gives the reader a basic sense of the subject. However, the vocabulary is repetitive and often imprecise, which sometimes makes the intended meaning hard to understand. For example, “Pandas are moving in some other countries” and “lion has replaced to other animals” do not clearly express the point, while “felling” appears where you mean “feeling.” There are also spelling and word-form problems such as “Graphas” and “afriad.” Build a more accurate range for discussing animal welfare, conservation, education, and visitor experience, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences using connectors, for example, “Finally, there are several other reasons…” This shows some effort to vary sentence structure. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes obscure meaning. Subject–verb agreement is often incorrect, as in “many people thinks” and “many animals is placed”; verb forms are also faulty in “families are enjoyed” and “people was saw.” Articles and plurals need attention, as in “a animal” and “a children.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are inconsistent, with several ideas joined by commas or capitalised after commas. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then build longer sentences while checking agreement, tense, articles, and punctuation.

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