Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

I largely disagree with the view that all zoos should be closed,simply because animals are no longer required to be kept in captivity.Although some times raising animals in captivity can put them through some disadadvantages, but zoos can provide with conservation,education and can play a great role in scientific research.

Firstly,zoo can provide a conservation source for the species which are endangered due to destruction of habitat, environmental changes or illegal hunting.By raising endangered species in captivity can preserve them.And after they mature they can be released into thier natural habitat.Therfore, closing all zoos can undermine this process.

Secondly, zoos can provide a great source of education for the children and adults as well.By observing them closely in zoo they can learn about how animals behave and the challenges they face in wildlife.Furthermore, zoo can provide great oppertunities for scientific research as well. we call learn about reproduction and disease prevention.

Nevertheless, critics largely critisize the zoos due to negative effects on animal due to kept in captivity.However, All these disadvantages can be minimilize by proper welfare of the animals in zoo. The zoos who care more about making profits rather than taking care of the animald should be closed. And Government should give proper instructions how to maintain a zoo.

In conclusion, not all zoos should be closed because thier benefits, in terms of education, research and conservation outweighs the disadvantages of negative effect of captivity.Which can be minimilize as well by proper maintence and instructions on how to operate the zoo.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the opening: you largely disagree with closing all zoos, while acknowledging that captivity can harm animals. You address the main parts of the question and give relevant reasons—conservation, education, research, and animal welfare—with a practical qualification that profit-driven zoos should close. This meets the task well, and the conservation example of breeding endangered species for possible release is a useful supporting detail. However, some points remain general: the education and research benefits are asserted rather than illustrated, and the welfare argument does not explain what standards or practices would reduce harm. Develop one or two examples further and clarify how you weigh these benefits against captivity’s effects to make the argument more fully convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for conservation and education/research, a counterargument, and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” “Nevertheless,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the argument. The progression is generally logical, and the conclusion returns to your central position. Some linking is mechanical, however, and a few connections are unclear. For example, “By raising endangered species in captivity can preserve them” does not clearly connect its opening phrase to the main clause, while the final “Which” fragment weakens the conclusion’s flow. Use cohesive devices more naturally, ensure each sentence has a clear link to the previous idea, and avoid beginning a sentence with a dependent “Which” clause.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “endangered species,” “destruction of habitat,” “illegal hunting,” “scientific research,” and “animal welfare,” which helps communicate the main ideas. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “undermine this process.” However, spelling errors and inaccurate word forms are noticeable, including “disadadvantages,” “thier,” “oppertunities,” “minimilize,” and “maintence.” Some collocations are also unnatural: “provide with conservation” and “a conservation source” do not express your meaning idiomatically. These issues make the vocabulary less precise and polished, although the overall message remains understandable. Check spelling carefully and learn common word partnerships, such as “support conservation efforts” and “provide opportunities for research.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex structures, including a concession in the opening and conditional reasoning about zoos’ benefits. The main ideas are usually understandable, but some sentence structures and agreement patterns are inaccurate. For example, “Although …, but …” uses two competing conjunctions, and “By raising endangered species in captivity can preserve them” lacks a clear grammatical subject. There are also errors in articles, number, and agreement, as in “zoo can provide” and “benefits … outweighs.” The final sentence beginning “Which can be minimilize” is a fragment rather than a complete sentence. Practise building complete clauses and checking subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation; this will make your complex sentences more controlled.

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