Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Animal do not deserve to be in the zoo shelters and it should be closed.The upcoming paragraphs will discuss the to what extend they agree with this statements including the growth of the animals and their survival skills.

The growth of the animals totally depends on the independence. In additio,when the animals gets the freedom they deserve,it helps them to give birth to their new ones and grow their ratio more.For example in the recent harvard study, researchers claimed that the most of the animals are more likely to grow more in the open atmosphere rather than a shelter and zoo.As a result, the growth of animals in the environmment will contribute to give better structure to the food chain.

Furthermore, the animals naturally have survival skills have in their blood.If the people will keep all the animals in the zoos, it will effect their skills of preying and to keep them safe from the predators.For intance, when animals live in a closed shelter,they sart depending on the zoo keepers for the food.As a result of this,animals get easily preyed by other animals of the forest.

To conclude, animal should not be kept in the zoos and deserve to be in the free environment.This eassy discussed how the animals loss their survival skills the their gwoth

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you agree that animals should not be kept in zoos, and you give two relevant reasons—reduced growth and loss of survival skills. The examples about reproduction and dependence on keepers help explain these points. However, the ideas remain limited and are not fully developed: the claim that animals grow more in open environments is asserted rather than explained, and the Harvard study is not described in enough detail to make it convincing. The response also does not consider any possible benefits of zoos, such as conservation. The required minimum of 250 words is not met; the response is 34 words short. Develop each reason with clearer explanation and a specific, relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate reasons, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “Furthermore” and “As a result” help signal relationships between ideas. However, progression is sometimes weakened by unclear or mechanical connections. For example, “The upcoming paragraphs will discuss the to what extend they agree” is awkward and does not clearly introduce the argument, while the conclusion repeats the main points without summarising them clearly. Some references are also difficult to follow, as in “it helps them” and “As a result of this.” Use simpler, more precise topic sentences and make sure each linking phrase accurately shows how one idea follows from another.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “independence,” “food chain,” “survival skills,” “preying,” and “predators,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning less clear. For instance, “zoo shelters” is not a natural way to refer to zoos, “grow their ratio” does not clearly express an increase in population, and “get easily preyed” is an incorrect expression. Spelling errors such as “environmment,” “intance,” and “eassy” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise vocabulary for animal welfare and conservation, and check spelling and common word partnerships before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional structure in “If the people will keep all the animals in the zoos…” and a cause-and-effect sentence beginning “As a result.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence construction occur throughout. Examples include “Animal do not deserve,” “the animals gets,” and “animals naturally have survival skills have in their blood.” The opening and conclusion also contain incomplete or awkwardly formed sentences. These errors sometimes make the reader work to understand your meaning. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly connected supporting clause, then check subject–verb agreement and verb forms.

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