Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given table compares average number of hours spent by male and females among six different age groups.

Overall,between 16-20 age-factors spent significant time on internet,while those aged 51 above spent least hours on browsing.Furthermore,in younger ages male spent slightly more than females,whereas it opposed among older age groups.

To begin with,looking at figures in detail , male aged 16-20 spend the higest amount of time on internet by 19,whilst female spent 18 hours.those who aged among 11-15 male spend 8 hours on internet ,compared 6 hours spent by women in same age factor.Moreover , 21-25 age wisely men and women spent 7 and 5 hours respectively.

However, this propostion changed by dropped in considerabely among 31-50 age factors at 3 hours by male as well as 4 hours for males which shoes demographic change between different ages.51 above age factors less interested to spend time on internet by 2 and 3 hours four males and females.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main pattern: the 16–20 group records the highest figures for both sexes, while the 51+ group records the lowest, and you note that male figures are generally higher in younger groups. Most reported values match the table. However, the overview says the gender pattern reverses among older groups, but this is only true for ages 31–50 and 51+; at 26–30 the figures are equal. There is also a data error in the final paragraph: for ages 31–50, the female figure is four, not “4 hours for males.” The response covers the task, but some comparisons are unclear or insufficiently precise. State the age-group pattern accurately and report each sex’s figures consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs. The sequence from the highest-use age group towards older groups is generally easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “To begin with” and “Moreover” help signal stages. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. “However, this proposition changed by dropped” does not clearly explain the shift, and the final sentence combines the 31–50 and 51+ groups without a clean transition. Punctuation spacing and sentence boundaries also make parts harder to read. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each comparison directly to its age group, rather than relying on formulaic transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “average,” “age groups,” “significant time” and “least hours,” so the main subject is usually understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning difficult to interpret. Examples include “age-factors,” “age wisely,” “proposition” and “demographic change,” which do not express the intended comparisons naturally. Spelling errors such as “higest,” “propostion” and “considerabely” also reduce precision. Aim for straightforward, accurate language rather than unusual phrases: terms such as “age group,” “hours spent online,” “declined” and “respectively” are more suitable for describing this table.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “whereas” and a comparison introduced by “compared.” The overall meaning can often be recovered, but some grammatical errors affect clarity. For example, “male aged 16-20 spend” shifts awkwardly between singular and plural, while “female spent 18 hours” needs a plural subject or a consistent singular construction. The sentence beginning “However, this proposition changed by dropped” is not grammatically complete, and “which shoes demographic change” has an unclear clause structure. There are also punctuation and spacing problems, such as missing spaces after commas. Build accurate sentence patterns first, especially for comparisons, and check subject–verb agreement and clause structure.

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