Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Good day. This is the information i noticed with the comparisson of Inetrnet usage between a Female and Male individuals. First, most male age 11 to 15 usage up to 8hours while female with lesser usage of 6 hours. In this case individual in 15yrs old below are still under the supervission of their parents or guardians thats why they're easy to control or follow certain house rule. While on the 16 to 20 age bracket they are almost identical with hours usage primarily with school homework and other activities. Also, most of these teenagers are engage with online games that took them severals hours logging in. In some using Internet to be socialized, meeting friends and engageging long hours or talk. Moreover, with 21-25 and 26-30 even up to 31-50 age bracket these type of users mostly are working, they intend to do they job/work using a computer plus some are also involve with gamingas part of there distress after a long day in the office. Lastly, 51 plus users some are businessman or working users other used internet for entertainment like watching vidoes or posting online involved business.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response identifies several relevant age groups and reports some accurate comparisons, including males at 8 hours versus females at 6 in the 11–15 group, and near-equal figures for ages 16–20. However, it does not provide a clear overview of the table’s main pattern: usage peaks among 16–20-year-olds and then generally declines with age. Several figures are omitted, and the discussion of ages 21–50 does not accurately distinguish the data: males spend more time in the 21–25 group, the figures are equal at 26–30, and females are slightly higher at 31–50. Much of the response speculates about parents, gaming, work and entertainment, which the table does not show. Focus on summarising the data rather than explaining possible causes.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response follows a broadly chronological sequence through the age groups, and signposts such as “First,” “Moreover” and “Lastly” help readers recognise the order of discussion. However, it is presented as one long paragraph, with no distinct introduction or overview to guide the reader through the key findings. Some transitions connect speculative explanations rather than comparisons in the table, and phrases such as “In this case” and “Also” do not always make the relationship between ideas clear. Group the information into an introduction and overview, followed by paragraphs comparing age groups, and use linking expressions to show contrasts or trends rather than simply moving from one group to the next.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses some relevant vocabulary, including “age bracket,” “usage” and “hours,” and attempts to describe comparisons with phrases such as “lesser usage” and “almost identical.” However, word choice and spelling errors are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “comparisson,” “Inetrnet,” “supervission,” “engageging” and “distress.” Several expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “most male age 11 to 15 usage” and “to be socialized.” Use accurate, straightforward language for reporting data: for example, “males aged 11–15 spent an average of eight hours online,” and “the figures were similar.” Proofread spelling and choose collocations that fit formal data description.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
There are attempts to combine ideas using clauses and connectors, for example, “while on the 16 to 20 age bracket” and “thats why they're easy to control,” but sentence structures are often faulty, and errors can make relationships between ideas unclear. The opening, “This is the information i noticed with the comparisson,” is not a well-formed formal sentence. Other problems include missing or incorrect articles and agreement, as in “most male age 11 to 15 usage,” “these teenagers are engage,” and “other used internet.” Punctuation and sentence boundaries also need attention: several long sentences join multiple ideas without clear separation. Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking verb forms and sentence structure.
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