Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table shows about the average hours spent on the internet by European people of different age groups, first in the table is the people that are 11-15 years old, male's is spending 8 hours and female's is spending 6 hours, there is a two-hour difference between them. The next on the table is people that are 16-20 years old, looking at the table we can see that male is spending much a lot of time in the internet which is shocking 19 hours, females lag behind by one hour, but overall, they also spend a lot of time on the internet. The next on the table is 21-25 years old people, the males is spending 7 hours and females is spending 5 hours, comparing with 16-20 year olds the result is much less, for males the hours decreased by 12 hours and for females is decreased by 13 hours. The next on the table is 26-30 year

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the table’s subject and report several accurate comparisons: for ages 11–15, males spend 8 hours and females 6, while the 16–20 group records the highest figures, 19 and 18. You also correctly describe the sharp fall for ages 21–25. However, the response stops partway through the 26–30 group and omits the 31–50 and 51+ figures, so it does not provide a complete summary or a clear overview of the main pattern across all age groups. The task requires at least 150 words, and this response is 143 words; the 15 words copied from the prompt are not counted. To improve, complete the comparisons and add an overview noting the peak at 16–20 and the general decline among older groups.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows the age groups in table order, which gives the reader a basic sequence, and phrases such as “The next on the table” signal movement to another category. However, this repeated formula makes the progression mechanical, and the response is presented as one long paragraph rather than being organised into an introduction, overview and detail paragraphs. Some links are also awkward: “comparing with 16-20 year olds” does not clearly connect the comparison to both genders, while “but overall” adds little to the point. Grouping the peak age range and the subsequent lower figures into a clear overview and body paragraphs would make the information easier to follow. Use concise transitions that show comparison or contrast rather than repeatedly announcing the next row.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for describing data, including “difference,” “decreased,” “lag behind” and “hours,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, the range is limited and several expressions are unnatural or repetitive, such as “spending much a lot of time in the internet” and “The next on the table.” “Shocking” is also an overly subjective choice for an academic summary. Aim for precise, neutral language and vary the verbs used to describe figures, for example, “record,” “spend” and “fall.” Check collocations carefully: people spend time “on the internet,” and a figure can be described as “higher” or “lower,” rather than using conversational emphasis.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine information using clauses and comparisons, as in “comparing with 16-20 year olds the result is much less,” and most of the intended meaning remains understandable. However, the response relies heavily on long, joined sentences, with limited control of sentence boundaries and punctuation. There are recurring errors in agreement and verb forms: “male is spending” and “the males is spending” should use plural agreement or a suitable singular subject, while “for females is decreased” needs a complete, correctly formed clause. Possessive forms such as “male’s” are also used where a plural noun is needed. Use shorter, complete sentences and check subject–verb agreement and tense consistency when reporting table data.

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