Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table illustrate information about the average hours spent on the internet by European people of different age groups. Overall, it is clear that the male hours average in 19 hours in day , While the female average in 18 hours in one day, In Male age firstly the children people in age 11 to 15 used internet 8 hour and 16 to 20 young most of time in internet 19 hours a one day and 21 to 25 in 7 and 26 to 30 in 4 and the 31 to 50 people are used in 3 hours a day. In female, are used the internet 11 to 15 children in 6 hour and 16 to 20 in 18 and 21 to 25 in 5 and 26 to 30 in 4 and the 31 to 50 age groups was used in 4 hours and the last 51 age groups in male and female was used in 2 to 3 hours a on day and 2 6 to 30 all male and female iin same 4 hour

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You report many of the table’s figures accurately, including the peak for 16–20-year-olds (19 hours for males and 18 for females) and the equal four-hour figures for ages 26–30. However, the response only partly fulfils the task because it mainly lists values rather than selecting and comparing the key features. The overview is also inaccurate: “the male hours average in 19 hours” and “the female average in 18 hours” present the peak values as overall averages. The table shows a clear pattern of usage peaking at ages 16–20 and then generally declining with age, which should be highlighted. You also omit the 51+ figures from the main sequence until the end. A concise, accurate overview and clearer comparisons would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response attempts a basic organisation by discussing males and then females, and it includes an opening statement and an overall comment. However, the information does not progress clearly: the male figures are listed in one long sentence, followed by a similarly extended female list, with the 51+ group and the repeated 26–30 comparison added at the end. Connectors such as “Overall,” “While,” and “and” do not reliably show how the figures relate, and punctuation makes the sequence difficult to follow. Separate the overview from the detailed comparisons, then group the age bands by pattern—for example, the peak group, the decline among older groups, and the one equal result. This would give the reader a clearer route through the data.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is sufficient to identify the topic and refer to age groups and figures, using terms such as “average hours,” “age groups,” and “used internet.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, including “most of time in internet” and repeated forms of “used.” Some word combinations make the intended meaning harder to understand, such as “the male hours average in 19 hours in day.” Use more precise reporting language and vary the verbs, for example, “spent,” “recorded,” or “declined.” Also take care with spelling and word forms, as in “iin,” and use standard expressions such as “hours per day.” These changes would make the data description clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts longer sentences and uses some basic linking, but sentence structures are limited and errors occur frequently enough to make parts difficult to follow. For example, “The table illustrate information” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “the female average in 18 hours” lacks a correct verb construction. The long sentence beginning “In Male age firstly” combines several clauses without clear grammatical boundaries, and the final phrase “2 6 to 30 all male and female” is difficult to interpret. Articles, plurals, prepositions, and punctuation are also inconsistently controlled. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then combine related comparisons using accurate structures such as “Males aged 16–20 spent 19 hours online, compared with 18 hours for females.”

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