Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

the table depicts the proportion of average hours spent on internet by European people of different age groups.

overall, the maximum hours spent by both male and female falls under the age group of 16 to 20 that is 19 and 18 respectively, whereas the minimum hours spent by both genders were belong to age group of 51 or above(males-2 and female-3).

furthermore, for the age group of 11 to 15 the number of makes and females are 8 and 6 respectively which are 1 unit greater then the numbers of both male and female of age between 21 and 25 which is (7 and 5 respectively. Additionally, the quantity of male and female remains constant which is 4 for the age of 24 to 30.

however, the average time spent my female is more than the male for the age group of 31 to 50. In total average hours spent by male is grater than that of females.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the data, including the highest and lowest age groups. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, listing figures rather than synthesizing trends. There is a factual error in the final sentence where you state that the total average hours for males is greater than females; based on the data provided, the female total is higher. Additionally, the age group '24 to 30' is mentioned, but the table likely intended '26 to 30'. To improve, focus on grouping data points more effectively and ensuring that your summary statements accurately reflect the overall trends shown in the table.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and mechanical (e.g., 'furthermore', 'additionally', 'however'). The transition between sentences is sometimes abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the third paragraph where the comparison between age groups is confusingly phrased. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that the logical progression between sentences is smoother, avoiding simple lists of data.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on basic terms like 'number of', 'quantity', and 'unit'. There are also some word choice errors, such as 'were belong to' instead of 'belonged to' or 'fell into'. To improve, incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'the figures for', 'a significant disparity', or 'remained stable'. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you avoid repetitive phrasing and demonstrate a more sophisticated command of the language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'the maximum hours spent... falls under' (subject-verb agreement), 'the number of makes' (likely a typo for 'males'), '1 unit greater then' (incorrect usage of 'then' instead of 'than'), and 'average time spent my female' (preposition error). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and ensuring that comparative structures (e.g., 'greater than') are used accurately.

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