Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Introduction, The table shows data about the fair hours spent on the online by European individual of unique age team
Overall, this table shows are different age to male and female. The table shows me high and low Comunidad. The date shows are26 to 30 age same.
Body 1,This table shows are different years age,firstly 11to15 age are male internet average hours spent are 8 and female are 6. Secondly are 16 to 20 age people average intranet hours spent are male 19 and female 18. 21 to 25 age people male 7 and female 5.
Body 2, In contrast, this table shows are 26 to 30 age people intranet average male by 4 and female by 4.31 to 50 use by male 3 and female 4. Last 51+ people male 2 and female 3. This table shows are16 to 20 age people is high average hours spent on the internet by European people. 26 to 30 age people are male and female same average Hours spent on the internet by European. This date table illustrated are 51+people are low hours spent on the internet.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by summarizing the provided data, but it lacks a clear overview of the main trends. While you identify the highest and lowest age groups, the description is fragmented and lacks a cohesive summary of the overall patterns. You have included specific data points for most age groups, which is good, but the presentation is repetitive and lacks analytical comparison. To improve, focus on grouping the data logically—for example, comparing the peak usage age group against the declining usage in older demographics—rather than listing each age group sequentially. Ensure you clearly highlight the most significant differences between genders and age categories to provide a more comprehensive summary.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is mechanical and repetitive. You rely heavily on simple transitions like 'firstly' and 'secondly,' which makes the writing feel like a list rather than a cohesive report. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'The date shows are 26 to 30 age same,' which is difficult to follow. To improve, use a wider variety of cohesive devices such as 'in contrast,' 'conversely,' or 'while,' and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data you are presenting.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, with frequent misuse of terms. For example, you use 'intranet' instead of 'Internet' and 'date' instead of 'data.' Phrases like 'fair hours' and 'unique age team' are unnatural and do not accurately convey the intended meaning. There is a lack of variety in how you describe the data; you frequently repeat 'average hours spent.' To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise terminology related to data reporting, such as 'fluctuated,' 'remained constant,' 'peaked,' or 'accounted for,' and ensure you are using the correct terminology for the subject matter.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'The table shows are' and 'The date shows are.' Sentence structures are predominantly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures and ensuring that your verbs agree with your subjects. Practice using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to combine simple ideas into more complex, fluid sentences.
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