Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Internets play a vital role in our life. Now a day internet is quite necessary and help us to solve many problems of us. using internet we can also safe our time using different kinds of technology.European people also use internet.

The age of 11-15 the rate of percentage is 8 percent for male and 6 percent for female that uses internet.mostly they are little persons they uses internet for entertainment for watching cartoons,etc.

The age of 16-20 the rate of percentage is 19 percent for male and 6 percent for female use internet. The rate is high because they are students and use internet for education purpose.

21-25 age the rate of male of is 7 percent and rate of female is 5 percent.

26-30 age the rate of male of is 4 percent and rate of female is 4 percent.Use internet for bussiness purpose.

31-50 age the rate of male of is 3 percent and rate of female is 4 percent.Use internet for bussiness purpose.

50 plus age the rate of male of is 2 percent and rate of female is 3 percent. They usually watch news for entertainment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to report the data but fails to provide a clear overview or identify significant trends. The inclusion of personal opinions and external information (e.g., 'they use internet for entertainment for watching cartoons') is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report, which should remain objective. Furthermore, the data presentation is inconsistent; the student lists percentages for each age group but fails to make meaningful comparisons between them or highlight the most significant figures. The response lacks a summary of the main features, which is a core requirement of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into short, fragmented paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, making the text feel like a list of isolated sentences rather than a cohesive report. Referencing is often unclear, and the transition between age groups is mechanical. While the information is presented in a sequence, the lack of linking words or a clear structure makes the overall flow disjointed and difficult to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic phrases like 'the rate of percentage is' and 'use internet for'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'little persons' instead of 'young people' or 'children', and 'bussiness' (spelling error). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision, and the tone is overly informal for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Internets play', 'they uses'), incorrect article usage, and sentence fragments. The structure is almost entirely composed of simple sentences, with no successful attempts at complex structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly regarding spacing and capitalization. The high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction significantly limits the communication of the data.

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