Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table presents information regarding hours spent by European people on internet which provides a comparison of the figures among different kind of categories.The data highlights the differences and similarities among the groups and illustrates about how the values are determined within the dataset.
For male, the figure stood at 8 hours in the age group of 11 to 15 and subsequently fluctuated with a higher value of 19 hours as well in about 16 to 20 age group.To sum up, the category displayed a noticeable downward trend or the given period.Furthermore for female, the highest number of hours were as same as compared to the age group of males.It is also observed that , in case of female ones, the table follows an downward trend.
Overall, considerable variation can be observed among different kind of categories.While the number of hours considered to be a highest figure was about 19 and 2 were the hours which remained at the least significant category.Furthermore, the data reveal clear differences between the groups despite some similarities in their patterns.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to adequately report the data provided in the table. While it mentions some figures, it lacks a comprehensive overview of the trends across all age groups. The description is fragmented and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the categories. For instance, the mention of 'downward trend' is inaccurate based on typical data patterns for internet usage, and the analysis is too vague, failing to identify key features or specific data points for most age groups. To improve, you must systematically present the data for all groups and highlight the most significant differences and similarities rather than providing a superficial summary.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The introduction is somewhat repetitive, and the body paragraphs lack clear focus. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Furthermore' and 'To sum up', but they are sometimes used mechanically or inappropriately, such as using 'To sum up' in the middle of a paragraph. The referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when referring to 'the category' or 'the groups' without specifying which ones. Improving the transition between sentences and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'different kind of categories' and 'the figure stood at' are used, but there is a lack of precision in describing statistical trends. Some word choices are awkward, such as 'female ones' and 'least significant category'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'a marginal increase'. Expanding your range of synonyms and focusing on accurate collocations will help you convey information more effectively and professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include missing articles (e.g., 'For male'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward phrasing ('as same as compared to'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. While these errors do not completely prevent the reader from understanding the general intent, they occur frequently enough to distract from the content. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles would lead to more accurate and polished writing.
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