Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table compares given data about the average hours consume on the internet by European individual from different age groups.
Overall, it is evident that in the data set they have compared different record while using the gender male and female . furthermore , given information shows the highest significant consume time on internet is from the age group of 16 to 20 which is 19 for male and 18 for female. Whereas the lowest average spent on internet from the age group of just over 50 year old.
Looking first at the age from 11 to 15 have an average of 8 for male and 6 for female then for the next set of age 16 to 20 the number shoot up to 19 in male , 18 for female which is the highest rise compares to any age group.
Turning to other figures have similar steady numbers which went up to an average of 7 for male and 5 for female. On the other hand 11 to 20 age group have the most average time consumed on internet.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by identifying the main features and making comparisons. However, the overview is somewhat confused, as it mentions 'gender' as a category rather than focusing on the age-related trends. While the key data points (16-20 age group being the highest) are identified, the analysis of the other age groups is vague and lacks precision. The report would benefit from a more structured approach to grouping the data, as the current description of the 'other figures' is unclear and fails to accurately reflect the trends across the remaining age brackets. The response covers the requirements but lacks the analytical depth needed for a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as the transition 'furthermore' which does not logically connect to the preceding sentence. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when referring to 'other figures' without specifying which age groups are being discussed. The flow between sentences is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of data points. Improved use of linking words and clearer signposting would significantly enhance the coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'consume time on internet' instead of 'time spent on the internet' and 'number shoot up' which is too informal for an academic report. The phrase 'highest significant consume time' is grammatically incorrect and lacks precision. To improve, you should focus on using more academic collocations and precise terminology related to data description, such as 'peak', 'fluctuate', or 'proportion'. The current range is sufficient for basic communication but lacks the flexibility required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'the age from 11 to 15 have' and 'the lowest average spent... from the age group'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. The range of structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. To improve, you should practice using more complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses or comparative constructions, and pay closer attention to basic grammatical rules like article usage and pluralisation.
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