Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the internet by European people of different age group.

First i would like to talk about a 11 to 15 years old European boys and girls who’s spent hours on internet.

11-15 years European Boys spent 8 hours on internet and 11-15 years European girls spent 6 hours on internet.their is 2 hours difference between them.

Now i would like to talk about a 16 to 20 years European boys and girl who spent hours on internet.

16 to 20 years European boys spent 19 hours on internet and girls spent 18 hours on internet.their is no much difference between them.

Now i would like to talk about a 21 to 25 years European boys and girl who spent hours on internet.

21 to 25 years boys spent 7 hours on internet and girl spent 5 hours on internet.their is 2 hour difference between girls and boys.

Now i would like to talk about a 26 to 30 years European boys and girl who spent hours on internet.

26 to 30 years boys spent 4 hours on internet and girl spent also 4 hours on internet they both are same.

Now i would like to talk about a 31 to 50 years European boys and girl who spent hours on internet.

The boys spent 3 hours on internet and girls spent 4 hours on internet.In first case the boy use internet less then girls.

Now i would like to talk about a 50+ ayears European boys and girl who spent hours on internet.

In this age the boys spent 2 hours on internet and girls spent 3 hours on internet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers all age groups provided in the data, but it fails to provide a clear overview or identify significant trends, which is a requirement for Task 1. The writing is overly repetitive, listing data points individually rather than synthesizing information or making meaningful comparisons. While the figures are generally accurate, the lack of an introductory summary or a concluding synthesis means the response does not fully address the requirements of an academic report. The approach is mechanical and lacks the analytical depth expected at higher bands.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The text is organized into very short, repetitive paragraphs, which makes the structure feel disjointed and mechanical. The use of cohesive devices is extremely limited, with almost every paragraph starting with the repetitive phrase 'Now i would like to talk about'. There is no logical progression or flow between the paragraphs. Referencing is also weak, with frequent misuse of 'their' instead of 'there'. The lack of linking words or varied transition signals makes the text difficult to read as a cohesive piece of writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very basic and highly repetitive. The student uses the same phrases ('spent hours on internet', 'European boys and girl') throughout the entire response. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'surpassed'. The spelling errors, such as 'ayears', and the consistent misuse of 'their' for 'there' indicate a limited control over lexical items and basic grammatical conventions, which restricts the ability to convey information with precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting almost entirely of simple sentences. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement ('who’s spent', 'boy use internet'), article usage, and pluralization ('different age group'). Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after periods and commas. The persistent confusion between 'their' and 'there' is a recurring error that affects the clarity of the sentences. Complex structures are absent, and the overall control of grammar is insufficient to support clear communication of the data.

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