Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the table show the data of common hours spent on internet by people of Europe of different age group

overall, the table show most hour spent on internet by old teenagers and lest time spent on internet is by old and elderly people

to begin with, time spent on internet by male part, throughout the age of 11 to 15 they are second highest. 16 to 20 are one of the most who spent time on internet. between the age group of 21 to 30 there are little less as compared to young ones and the between the age group of 31 to 51+ it mere 4 or 5

furthermore, the time spent on internet by female between the age Groupe of 11 to 15 is less then male and the age group of 16 to 20 it also less than the males but highest compared to all other age group

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarize the data, but it fails to provide a clear or accurate overview. The description of the data is fragmented and lacks necessary detail, such as specific figures for most age groups. The comparison between genders is vague, using phrases like 'little less' and 'one of the most' without referencing the actual data points provided in the table. Furthermore, the information is incomplete, as it does not cover all age groups or provide a comprehensive summary of the trends. To improve, you must ensure all key features are identified and supported with accurate data from the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into short, disjointed paragraphs. While there is a basic attempt at logical progression, the lack of cohesive devices makes the text feel repetitive and mechanical. Transitions between sentences are weak, and the referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of data. The use of paragraphing is present but does not effectively group related ideas. To reach a higher band, you should use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'consequently', 'furthermore') to connect your ideas more fluidly and improve the overall flow of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'time spent' and 'internet' without variation. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'male part' and 'old teenagers', which are not appropriate for an academic report. Spelling errors, such as 'Groupe' and 'lest', further detract from the quality of the writing. To improve, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuation', 'significant', and 'trend', and ensure you use them in the correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the table show'), missing articles ('on internet' instead of 'on the internet'), and incorrect sentence structures. The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors in tense and preposition usage. To improve, you need to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that articles are used correctly. Practicing complex sentence structures will also help you move beyond simple, error-prone statements.

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