Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The visualize the information about the average hours spent by the European people on the internet by the different age groups, As male and female.

Overall, the the most of most of time spent by the male and female is from the age of 16 to 20 as there are nineteen hours spent by males on internet from the age of sixteen to twenty and 18 hours spent by female on internet from age of sixteen to twenty.

If we take a look to the least time spent on internet by European people are from the age of above 51 like there are 2 hours spent by males and only 3 hours spent by females on internet as shown in the table .

While the others like from the age of 21 to 25, for the females they have spent 5 hours and males have spent 7 hours and the kids from 11 to fifteen have also spent some time on the internet like females have spent six hours and males have spent 8 hours.

The people who are the age of 31 to 50 have 3 hours spent by males and 4 hours spent by females.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the data, such as the peak usage in the 16-20 age group and the lowest usage in the 51+ category. However, the report lacks a clear, analytical overview. The introduction is poorly phrased, and the data presentation is somewhat mechanical, listing figures rather than synthesizing trends or making meaningful comparisons. While the task is addressed, the lack of a strong summary and the repetitive structure of the sentences prevent it from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on grouping data logically and highlighting significant differences or similarities between age groups and genders rather than just listing numbers.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'and' to connect clauses. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the progression of ideas feels like a list rather than a cohesive report. Paragraphing is present but could be more effectively used to separate different trends or age brackets. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would significantly enhance the coherence of the writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'spent by' and 'on the internet' are used repeatedly, which limits the range. There are some minor errors in word choice, such as 'The visualize the information', which should be 'The table visualizes the information'. To achieve a higher score, you should aim to use a wider variety of verbs and nouns to describe data, such as 'allocate', 'devote', 'figures', or 'proportions', and avoid repeating the same phrasing throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include incorrect article usage ('the the most of most of time'), subject-verb agreement, and awkward phrasing ('If we take a look to the least time'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some run-on sentences and unnecessary spaces. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors is noticeable. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement and article usage would help improve the accuracy of your writing.

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