Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The table illustrated the average hour spent on internet of european people of different age group.

overall the adult spent more hour on internet however older devote less time on internet.

at the first glance 21 25 and 11 15 spent nearly equal time on internet .the 16 20 ages male devote more time on internet as compare to girls.

moving on26 30 male and female ratio is equal. in 51 plus male spent 2 hours and female spent 3 hours.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement. The content is very brief and lacks a clear overview or a detailed summary of the data. While some comparisons are attempted, the analysis is superficial and fails to highlight the main features or trends effectively. The information provided is fragmented, and the lack of sufficient detail means the task is only partially addressed. To improve, you must ensure you write at least 150 words and provide a more comprehensive analysis of the data, including a clear introduction, a summary of key trends, and specific supporting details.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks a logical structure. There is no clear paragraphing, and the sentences are disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and often misused, such as 'at the first glance' and 'moving on', which do not effectively link the ideas. The progression of information is unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of data. To improve, you should organize your response into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on specific data points. Use a wider range of linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'similarly' to connect your ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'spent', 'time', and 'internet'. There is little evidence of the range of vocabulary required for an Academic Task 1 response, such as terms to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuate', 'decline', 'peak'). Additionally, there are errors in word formation and collocation, such as 'average hour' instead of 'average hours' and 'as compare to' instead of 'compared to'. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to data description and ensure you use words in their correct grammatical form.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentence structures. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement ('adult spent', 'male spent'), article usage, and punctuation. The lack of complex sentence structures prevents you from demonstrating control over a variety of grammatical forms. Many sentences are fragmented or poorly constructed, which hinders clarity. To improve, practice using a mix of simple and complex sentences, and pay close attention to verb tenses and pluralization. Proofreading your work for basic errors like missing articles or incorrect verb forms is essential.

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