Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In Europe different ages of people spend their time on the internet .

Here we make the report average hours they spend to following the table.

11 to 15 years of male spend almost 8 hours but the females use internet for 6hours. Male and female between 16 to 20 use internet maximum rather then others because hormonal changes their prefrence also impact.

when they reach in maturity phase their time be more valueable and also they decrease their internet use which contains only 7 to 5 hours.

when we reasearch about 26 plus ages also a practical life enterence they have no much time for idol working hence they use internet only 3 to 4 hours. Essentially 31 to 50 it also same as above But when they reach on 50 plus it will be more decrease to 2 to 3 hours.

In conclusion 16 plus have highly record compare then others.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview or highlight the most significant trends. The information is presented in a fragmented way, and the analysis is often inaccurate or speculative (e.g., mentioning 'hormonal changes' or 'maturity phase,' which are not supported by the data). The report lacks a clear structure, and the comparisons are poorly developed. While some data points are mentioned, the overall summary of the main features is missing, and the response relies on personal interpretation rather than objective reporting of the provided table. To improve, focus on identifying the highest and lowest figures and grouping age categories logically.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization. There is no clear paragraph structure, and the progression of ideas is disjointed. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the abrupt transition 'when we reasearch about 26 plus ages'. The conclusion is very brief and does not effectively summarize the main points. The lack of clear linking words makes it difficult to follow the relationship between the different age groups and their internet usage. Improving the use of transition signals and organizing the report into clear paragraphs (Introduction, Overview, and Body Paragraphs) is essential for better coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inappropriate for an academic report. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as 'idol working' (likely meaning 'idle time'), 'enterence' (entrance), and 'highly record' (highest usage). The phrasing is often unnatural, which hinders the clarity of the report. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or data comparisons effectively. To reach a higher band, you should learn specific collocations for describing data, such as 'significant decrease,' 'peak usage,' or 'a downward trend,' and focus on using precise terminology rather than informal or speculative language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('11 to 15 years of male spend'), incorrect sentence structure ('when they reach in maturity phase their time be more valueable'), and misuse of prepositions and articles. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the existing sentences are often fragmented or poorly constructed. Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions in an academic context.

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