Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given table illustrates the average hours spent on the internet by european people of different age group :

At the age of 11-15 males spend 8 hours daily on internet whereas at the same age females spend 6 hours whereas at the age of 16-20 men spent 19 hours in average whereas female spent 18 hours on mobile phones in average, on the other hand at the age of 21-25 males spend 7 hours on mobile phones in average whereas females spend 5 hours in a day subsequently 26-30 male spend 4 hours on phone the count of female is same as that of males whereas at the age of 31-50males prefer to use phone for 3 hours whereas females prefer to use phone for 4hours, on the other hand during the age of 51+ males prefer using phone for 2 hours, whereas female prefer to use phone for anhour more which is 3 hours.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to cover the data provided in the table, but it fails to provide an overview or identify key trends, which is a requirement for Task 1. The writing is essentially a list of data points rather than a summary. Furthermore, there is a significant issue with accuracy: the prompt refers to 'Internet' usage, but the student repeatedly refers to 'mobile phones', which is not supported by the task data. This misinterpretation of the data significantly impacts the task achievement score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is written as a single, long, run-on paragraph. There is a lack of logical progression or paragraphing to separate different age groups or trends. While some cohesive devices like 'whereas' and 'on the other hand' are used, they are repetitive and often used incorrectly to link unrelated clauses. The lack of punctuation, particularly the absence of full stops between distinct ideas, makes the text difficult to follow and results in a lack of overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic phrases like 'spend... hours' and 'prefer to use'. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuate', 'peak', 'decline', 'remain stable'). Additionally, the persistent use of 'mobile phones' instead of 'the Internet' indicates a failure to accurately report the information provided in the prompt, which limits the lexical range and accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical structure is poor. The entire response consists of a series of comma-spliced clauses rather than distinct, grammatically correct sentences. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'male spend', 'female spent') and tense consistency. The lack of proper punctuation, including missing spaces after commas and the absence of periods, makes the text very difficult to read. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the basic structures used are frequently inaccurate.

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