Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given table chart depicts the information related to the different age group spent hours on internet by European people.
Overall; the maximum number of hours are spend by the teenagers and on the other hand; minimum number of hours can be notice in elder people on internet.
To begin with; In year 11-15 males have average of 8 hours online . Age group of 16-20 has highest number of hours devoted online which is about 19 hours . The lowest number of hours can be notice by elder people of age group 51+ which is only about 2. Other age group has a medium number of hours spend on internet.
Moving towards, remaining information which is related to females ; the highest number of hours can be notice with age group of 16-20 as similar as males. The lowest number can be notice by elder people which is only about 3 hours . In age group of 26-30 both the males and female has a similar number of hours
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response provides a basic overview of the data, identifying the highest and lowest age groups. However, the reporting is inconsistent and lacks sufficient detail. While you mention the 16-20 age group and the 51+ group, you fail to provide a comprehensive comparison across all categories. The data is presented in a fragmented way, and some figures are missing or poorly integrated. To improve, ensure you group the data logically (e.g., by age or by gender) and include more specific data points to support your observations, ensuring all parts of the prompt are addressed with greater clarity and depth.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by repetitive phrasing and awkward transitions. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes incorrect, such as the overuse of semicolons and the phrase 'Moving towards, remaining information'. The progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between males and females. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, such as one paragraph for the highest trends and another for the lowest or gender-based comparisons.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'number of hours', 'highest', and 'lowest'. There are noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'can be notice' instead of 'can be noticed' and 'spend by the teenagers' instead of 'spent by teenagers'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more varied descriptive language, such as 'devoted to', 'allocated to', 'the majority of time', or 'a significant proportion', and focus on accurate word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'males and female has a similar number') and verb forms (e.g., 'are spend' instead of 'are spent'). The sentence structures are predominantly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences are often marred by punctuation errors, particularly the misuse of semicolons. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct tense usage, and refining your punctuation. Reducing the frequency of these errors is essential for achieving a higher score.
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