Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The data table illustrated that the European people who spent average hours on the internet at age category.

Overall, the highest number of age people spent their time on screen is 16 to 20 where male have 19 and female have 18 out of thjs male has highest number. While the lowest number of age who spent average hours in their internet

Is 51+ where male have less than female

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 70 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While you have identified some data points, the summary is incomplete and lacks a comprehensive overview of the trends. You have not provided a clear comparison across all age groups, and the information is too sparse to satisfy the requirements of an Academic Task 1 report. To improve, you must ensure you describe all key features of the data and provide a more detailed analysis to meet the length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks a clear logical structure. There is no paragraphing, and the transition between the introduction and the body is abrupt. The use of cohesive devices is very limited, making the text feel like a collection of disjointed sentences rather than a cohesive report. To achieve a higher score, you should organize your response into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and specific details. Use linking words such as 'in contrast,' 'furthermore,' or 'whereas' to connect your ideas more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'highest number of age people' and 'lowest number of age' are imprecise and do not accurately describe the data. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'thjs' (typo) and 'on screen' (which is not explicitly defined in the prompt). To improve, you should use more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'the 16-20 age bracket,' 'a significant proportion,' or 'the lowest recorded figure.' Expanding your range of descriptive verbs and nouns will help convey the information more professionally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammar is frequently inaccurate, which hinders the clarity of your report. There are issues with sentence structure, such as 'The data table illustrated that the European people who spent average hours on the internet at age category,' which is grammatically incomplete. You also struggle with subject-verb agreement and prepositional usage. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensure that your verbs agree with your subjects. Practice using complex sentences to describe trends, such as 'While the 16-20 age group spent the most time online, those aged 51 and over spent the least.'

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