Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

illustrating the average hours spent the internet in different ages indivisuals of european countries, the provided bar chart compare the ages, beween 11 and 52 years, with figure measured in ages.

in general term, it striking that male and female in yooung and adolescents , whose experienced a marked upward trajectory, while young generation exhibited a substantial decline, old generation saw a lowst proportion during the entire span

turning to the proportion who experienced rise, adolescents started at 11-15 , reached in 8 male and 6 female, similarly younger proportion begenning at 16-20 , registerd escalete, male 19 and female 6 respectively.

By the contrast , mature aged and old aged followed a opposite trajectory,

diminishing sharply decline, male 4 and female 4, male 3 female 4 , there by experienced a decline almost double mature and old proportion as well as,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to summarise the main features of the chart, mentioning various age groups and general upward and downward trends. However, the student fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, as the text contains only 142 words. Furthermore, the reporting of specific data figures is highly inaccurate, fragmented, and difficult to follow (e.g., 'reached in 8 male and 6 female'). While there is an attempt to cover the main features, key information is omitted or poorly conveyed due to severe linguistic and organizational limitations. Ideas are under-developed and lack precision, placing this response at a Band 4.5 level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks clear logical organisation and progression. The text is broken into short, disjointed sentences and paragraphs that fail to guide the reader smoothly through the data. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly, such as the abrupt transitions 'in general term' and 'By the contrast'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak, with repetitive and chaotic phrasing that impedes overall coherence. Referencing between ideas is frequently unclear, resulting in a performance that aligns with Band 4.0 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and frequently incorrect. Words are misused in terms of collocation and word class, such as 'indivisuals', 'yooung', 'begening', and 'escalete'. Phrases like 'lowst proportion' and 'diminishing sharply decline' demonstrate a severe lack of control over lexical items. The range of vocabulary is extremely limited and inadequate for an academic task, often straining the reader's understanding and falling firmly into the Band 4.0 category.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text is plagued by severe structural errors, incorrect verb forms, missing prepositions, and faulty punctuation. Sentences like 'whose experienced a marked upward trajectory' and 'there by experienced a decline almost double mature and old proportion as well as' show a very limited range of structures, with attempts at complex sentences resulting in incomprehensible clauses. Errors are frequent and consistently distort the meaning, matching the criteria for Band 4.0.

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