Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The provided table illustrates the data of average hours spending time on the internrt by European individuals of various age group according to the gender.

Overall, the most highest time the male used more hours internet compared to female. In additionly, the higehest proportion of using internet was those aged 16 to 20 years in both group wherease, the lowest was group of people those aged over the 51 in both male and female.

The highest proportion of using internet those aged 16 to 20 male accounted for 19 hours and female accounted for 18 hours in per week. Followed by, people those aged 11 to 15 was second higest data where men accounted for 8 hours and women accounted for 6 hours. The age between 21 to 25 people using internet time decreasing sharphly to 7 hours and 5 hours in male and female.

In contrast, the user of internet was falling down continue after age getting older the age between 31 to 50 the hours of using internet accounted for 4 hours in both gender. At the end ther number of using of the time of internet felling 2 and 3 hours in indiviudal those aged ovetr the 51 in both gender.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to summarise the data by identifying overall trends and specific figures, such as the highest and lowest age groups. However, the response contains several inaccuracies in reporting the data, such as claiming that males spent more hours overall, which may not align with the complete table, and stating incorrect figures in places (e.g., '19 hours and female accounted for 18 hours in per week'). Furthermore, some sentences are extremely difficult to parse due to poor phrasing, leading to a partial or unclear presentation of the main features and comparisons. While the writer attempts to cover the task requirements, the lack of precision and confusing reporting place this response in Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, showing an attempt at organisation. However, the overall progression is heavily disrupted by poor grammatical structures and mechanical or misused cohesive devices such as 'In additionly', 'wherease', and 'Followed by,'. Referencing is frequently unclear, and sentences often lack logical links, making the text disjointed. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is faulty throughout. There is a lack of smooth transitions between ideas, resulting in a confusing read that aligns best with Band 5.0 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The lexical range is quite limited and heavily repetitive, relying on basic terms such as 'hours', 'internet', 'male', 'female', and 'age'. There are numerous word choice and spelling errors, such as 'internrt', 'higehest', 'sharphly', 'felling', and 'ovetr'. The student attempts less common vocabulary phrases like 'proportion of using internet', but these are executed with persistent inaccuracy and unnatural collocations. Because the lexical errors are frequent and occasionally impede communication, this falls into the Band 4.0 to 5.0 range, comfortably sitting at a 4.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of poorly constructed simple and attempted complex sentences that are plagued by persistent, severe errors. Examples include 'the most highest time the male used more hours internet compared to female' and 'At the end ther number of using of the time of internet felling 2 and 3 hours in indiviudal those aged ovetr the 51'. There are frequent errors in tense, word order, prepositions, and clause structure, which severely distort meaning and cause significant difficulty for the reader. This performance aligns with Band 4.0.

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