Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

we can see in the table the average hours European people spent on internet from a different age categories and we can see clearly that males from a very young age to their thirties spend more time than women and we can see that both categories in their teenage age spend a lot of time on the internet rather than young and adults , it's also clear that males after the age of thirty they don't spend a lot of time in the internet as they used to do before and this is also with females.

According to this table it's obvious that young people especially teenagers and youth people spend a lot of time on the internet and this is can be because they are not aware or ready enough to face reality and real life issues but the more people get older the less they waste their time using internet as an internment .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the task by reporting some main features from the table, such as noting that males generally spend more time on the internet than females and identifying the 16-20 age group as having the highest usage. However, the response falls short of a fully developed task achievement because it contains significant over-generalizations and includes irrelevant personal commentary ('this is can be because they are not aware or ready enough to face reality'). While some figures are referenced broadly, specific data comparisons are vague, and the overview lacks precision. According to the official descriptors, this corresponds to a Band 5.0, as the task is addressed only partially, with limited and under-developed ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text suffers from severe structural and cohesive issues. The entire response is written as just two excessively long, run-on sentences connected by repetitive use of 'and we can see'. There is no paragraphing used to separate the introduction, body features, and concluding summary. Cohesive devices are extremely basic and repetitive, lacking logical organisation and clear progression. Because referencing is unclear and paragraphing is absent, the response aligns best with Band 4.0, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The lexical range is quite limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic vocabulary such as 'time', 'people', 'internet', and 'spend'. There are noticeable inappropriate word choices, such as 'internment' instead of 'entertainment' or 'interneting', and phrasing like 'teenage age' and 'youth people' rather than standard collocations. Although the meaning is mostly decipherable despite these issues, the vocabulary lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. This performance reflects Band 5.0, featuring a limited but minimally adequate range with noticeable errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatically, the response is heavily flawed by a lack of proper punctuation, resulting in two massive run-on sentences that string multiple clauses together with coordinating conjunctions like 'and'. There is a very limited range of sentence structures, and attempts at complex or subordinate clauses are frequently faulty (e.g., 'this is can be because'). Frequent errors in tense consistency and clause structure strain the reader and obscure clear meaning. This matches the Band 4.0 descriptor, where errors are frequent and often distort meaning.

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