Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The table chart illustrates the information about the typical hours spent on the internet by european residents of different age groups.
Overall, in this chart shows that the both males and females are included.Else, the stregthen of males are higher than the females.In the age of 11-15 the boys are 8 persons while the females are 6 grils. However, the 16-20 years age group in this age group, the males are 19 while the females are 18. Therefore, the age group of 21-25 the makes are 7 but the females are 5.
In contrast, the peoples are in aged group is 26-30 this aged group is both are equals males and females. After that the age group of 31-50, in this stage the males are lower than the females so, males are 3 and females are 4. At the end of this stage the peoples are above than 50 years, in this aged group the males are 2 persons while the females are 3 3.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the data provided in the table, noting specific figures for males and females across various age groups. However, the data is frequently misinterpreted or misreported. For instance, the student describes the figures as 'persons' or 'grils' rather than average hours, showing a fundamental misunderstanding of the task units. While an overview is attempted ('Overall, in this chart shows that the both males and females are included'), it fails to clearly highlight the main trends, such as the peak in internet usage among the 16-20 age group. The response addresses parts of the task but lacks sufficient development and accurate data reporting, aligning with a Band 4.5 to 5.0 level. We award a Band 5.0 for addressing the prompt minimally while including relevant raw figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organisation of the text is basic and lacks clear overall progression. The essay is divided into short, disjointed sentences rather than well-developed paragraphs. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'Else, the stregthen of males are higher', 'However, the 16-20 years age group in this age group', and 'Therefore, the age group of 21-25 the makes are 7'. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the mechanical repetition of sentence structures ('in this age group, the males are...') hinders the flow of ideas. Paragraphing is poorly handled, resulting in a single block of fragmented text. This fits the Band 4.0 descriptors for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple terms like 'males', 'females', 'age group', and 'persons'. There are also several vocabulary errors and misappropriate word choices, such as 'stregthen' (strength/proportion) and 'grils' (girls). The student misinterprets the data category ('average hours spent') as a count of people ('8 persons', '6 grils'). The range of vocabulary is limited and inadequate for a precise discussion of statistical data, which reflects the Band 4.0 criteria.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of simple, repetitive sentence structures ('the males are 19 while the females are 18'). There are frequent and systematic grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('the peoples are in aged group is'), incorrect prepositions ('in aged group', 'above than 50 years'), and severe punctuation and run-on sentence errors. These numerous errors frequently strain the reader and obscure the intended meaning, placing the performance firmly at Band 4.0.
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