Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
People average hours spent on the online platforms in European of different age group. Europeans age groups were illustrates in this table, 11-15, 16-20,
21 - 25, and 26 -30, 31-50 and also 51 plus.
Overall, Euopeans male average spent time on social activities different afe groups in European peak above rather than female as well as, the amount of Europeans womean average spent time on entertainment by different other age groups.
In this table, male was started the connected time on social media high and extremely on peak 8 as 19. Other the amount of people minmum time stayed with internet around 7 or 4. In addition the last male age groups very lowest time was 2 in Europe.
On the other hand, the female average spent time with touched internet 6 to 18. the other female age groups in Europe campared with other so was extremely slow was 5 and 4. and last average spent time with online lessiure time was 3, it was bite more decreased by the european ae groups.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by mentioning various age groups and figures from the table, such as '11-15' and peaks like '19' and '18'. However, the overall summary and reporting of main features are severely compromised by unclear phrasing and a lack of precise comparison. The overview attempted in the second paragraph is fragmented and difficult to follow, failing to clearly outline the main trends (such as the 16-20 age group recording the highest internet hours across both genders, and usage declining steadily with age). While some data points from the table are referenced, the lack of coherent data selection and accurate reporting means the response falls short of the higher band requirements, aligning closely with a Band 4.5 to 5.0 level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow and progression are weak. The introduction is disjointed, and the overview lacks clarity. Cohesive devices are either missing, misused, or overly repetitive (e.g., starting sentences with 'In this table,' 'On the other hand,' and 'Other the amount of people'). Paragraphing is attempted, but internal paragraph cohesion is frequently disrupted by broken syntax and ungrammatical transitions. Referencing is often ambiguous, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of ideas. Overall organization is insufficient to achieve a higher band, reflecting a Band 4.5 performance.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very limited and often inappropriate for an academic task. Phrasing such as 'average spent time on the online platforms', 'stayed with internet', and 'touched internet' demonstrates poor word choice and a lack of control over standard collocations. There are frequent lexical errors and odd phrasing ('online lessiure time', 'bite more decreased') that obscure meaning and strain the reader. The range is inadequate to discuss statistical data effectively, restricting the score to a Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the text. The response relies on very limited sentence structures, and attempts at complex or descriptive sentences are consistently faulty (e.g., 'Euopeans male average spent time on social activities different afe groups in European peak above rather than female'). There are pervasive errors in verb tenses, word order, and missing prepositions or articles. Error frequency is very high, and many sentences impede clear communication, placing this response firmly in the Band 4.0 category.
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