Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

its given that average hours spent on the internet by european people of different age groups there are many people on the worlwde that uses nternet some for onlne educatons and other ones use nternet for entertanment theres one group from age 11 to 15 wjch s mostly consider as childs in which there is 8% is male and 6%female and after ths there es age group of 16-20 n whch 19% s male and 17% s female these type of groups s usually nown as mnors after these two there comes age group 21to 25 n whch the male percentage s more usage on nternet these are nown as youths the young generaton there r many people use nternet for dfferent purposes of lfe after all these there comes the group n whch age group includes 26to30 in this the both genders are using internert equally age group like 26 is mostly for work rest and again work.And 30 is the age of taking responsibilities alone so maybe that is the reason that in these ages botch genders are using internent equallly.Moreover there iis age 31 which is known people whch are more mature then youths so iin these theres 3%of male and 4% of females.At last there s last age group nown as senor ctzen of all over the world iiin whiich 2% iis male and 3%iiiis female.Thiiis s the age where some people become so hopeless and survve there last days whiiile on the other hand there are many people who do the real life activity for relaxing there stress that is why the rateo of theese age group s less then as compare to others.so n ths asuume that the age group of mnors usong the hgh ratonboth genders . Entetnet es one of the useful thngs that people use stng n any corner of lfe.And it plays a vital role in our daily life as well .Internet connects the people through the world .Nowdays people r often connected just because of internet .It is like more esential for everyoine.In the conclusion the table gives the infromation of diffrent age groups spent their time on internet.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response makes an attempt to discuss the data provided in the table regarding internet usage by age group. However, the student misinterprets the percentages as proportions of a whole rather than average hours spent, and introduces a significant amount of irrelevant personal commentary and speculation (e.g., claiming that 30 is the age of taking responsibilities alone or describing senior citizens as becoming 'hopeless'). Furthermore, the overview is extremely weak and buried within repetitive filler text. While the main groups are mentioned, the lack of accurate data reporting (treating figures as percentages instead of hours) and the inclusion of extensive extraneous information prevent the response from achieving a higher band. It falls under Band 4 as the response is partially tangential and relies on misinterpretation of the data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The essay lacks clear logical organisation and progression. The text is presented as one massive block of writing with virtually no effective paragraphing, making it extremely difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are either missing, repetitive, or inappropriate, as seen in phrases like 'after all these there comes the group' and 'At last there s last age group nown'. Referencing is often confusing, and the transition between discussing the table data and inserting random personal opinions is abrupt. Although some basic connectors like 'Moreover' are used, the overall structure is faulty and lacks clear progression, placing it at Band 4.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, highly repetitive, and heavily impacted by numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'worlwde', 'entertanment', 'mnors', 'raton', and 'esential'. While the student attempts to use some less common words like 'responsibilities' and 'generation', the overwhelming number of word-choice and spelling errors often strains the reader and impedes clear communication. Expressions like 'hgh ratonboth genders' demonstrate a lack of lexical control. This corresponds to the Band 4 descriptor where basic vocabulary and frequent errors impede understanding.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of poorly constructed, run-on simple sentences linked by conjunctions without proper punctuation. There is a complete lack of control over basic sentence boundaries, as seen in sentences like 'its given that average hours spent on the internet by european people of different age groups there are many people on the worlwde that uses nternet...'. Errors in verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and missing auxiliary verbs are pervasive throughout the entire text. Punctuation is largely neglected or misused. This reflects Band 4, where errors are frequent and often distort meaning.

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