Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

so here i have a chart table which is data from europeon peolples who spent there time on social media there is diffrent age group and diffrenet genders male and female. The age between 11 to 15 years the ratio of users is 8 male and 6 female so considerable that the male users are greater than female user and they spend more time on internet but i dont know whats actual they watch on internet may it was study perpose,research or any other whatever we have only data of genders ratio not deep knowledge so first we start from 11-15 years old now we talk about 16-20 years old people so there male users is 19 while females are 18 its also greater ratio from male side.Now see age group of 21 to 25 whichis gap of 5 years and they are new generations like youth of europe.

Male users are 7 female users are 5 age from 26 to 30 male users are 4 and female users also 4 so we can say in this age group both are equal users both have same points.while age from 31 to 50 they considers senior people and they are much mature from others age group they have more responsibilies in there life and there rario is 3 male and 4 females user now last group data from table is 51+ they mainly consider old poor people they not know about internet so obvesly there users data is less then other age groups so there data is 2 males and 3 females.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response attempts to cover the data from the table detailing the average hours spent on the internet by European people of different age groups. However, the tone is inappropriately conversational and informal ("so here i have a chart table", "i dont know whats actual"). Furthermore, the student includes personal commentary and subjective assumptions (e.g., claiming that people aged 31-50 have more responsibilities, or that those 51+ are "old poor people"), which goes against the requirements of an academic task that demands objective reporting of facts. Although the main age groups and gender figures are mentioned, the lack of an overview and the inclusion of irrelevant personal speculation prevent the response from achieving a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The organization of the text is severely hindered by a complete lack of paragraphing; the entire response is written as a single, continuous block of text. Cohesive devices are largely absent or rudimentary, heavily reliant on run-on structures, conversational fillers ("so here i have", "now see"), and repetitive conjunctions. There is no clear progression of ideas, and referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information smoothly. The logical arrangement of the data reported from the table is compromised by the conversational tangents.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and informal. The student relies on simple words like "users", "data", "greater", and "time". There are numerous spelling errors and misspellings (e.g., "europeon", "peolples", "diffrent", "perpose", "rario", "obvesly"). The range of vocabulary is inadequate for an academic task, showing little ability to use less common lexical items or appropriate synonyms to describe statistical data (such as "proportion", "figure", or "significant"). Word choice is frequently awkward or inappropriate for formal writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the text. The response consists heavily of run-on sentences joined inappropriately by commas or coordinating conjunctions without proper punctuation (e.g., "The age between 11 to 15 years the ratio of users is 8 male and 6 female so considerable that the male users are greater than female user..."). There is a lack of control over complex sentence structures, and basic errors in subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and punctuation occur frequently. These persistent errors often impede communication and strain the reader's understanding.

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