Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table provides information about the average spending hours in sociel media by different european ages groupe of people male and female .

Overall, the figure shows that the poeple between 16 and 20 years are the most individuals spending time on social media for both category male and female , whereas the old people over 51 yeas are less spending time on social media for each male and female.

the people between 16 and 20 years are the most spending time with 19 for male and 18 for female , however the 51 years old people are the less users of social media with 2 for male and 3 for the female . In addition there is 8 male and 6 female nembers of people between 11 and 15 years .

to same up , the teneegers between 16 and 20 years are the most category of people spending time of social media however , the oldest category over 51 yeas are the people who spend less time on social media

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the prompt by reporting information from the table regarding internet usage across different age groups and genders. However, the prompt specifies 'average hours spent on the Internet', whereas the student repeatedly refers to 'social media'—a significant inaccuracy regarding the nature of the data provided. An overview is attempted ("Overall, the figure shows that..."), noting the peak in the 16-20 age group and the lowest usage in the 51+ category. While some key features and figures (such as 19, 18, 2, and 3) are accurately reported, the misinterpretation of internet use as social media use, combined with some minor omissions of other age brackets, limits the development. Consequently, this falls under band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response is divided into four very short paragraphs, though paragraphing is poorly handled with no clear separation of introduction, body, and conclusion logic (re-stating the same points multiple times). There is an attempt at overall progression, but the writing is highly repetitive, especially the over-reliance on phrases like 'people between 16 and 20 years are the most spending time'. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes inaccurate ('to same up' instead of 'to sum up'). Referencing is repetitive rather than smooth. The lack of varied cohesive structures and the circular repetition of the same two main points restrict the score to a 4.5, rounded to 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive. The student repeatedly uses phrases like 'spending time on social media' (which is also factually inaccurate for the task). There are frequent spelling mistakes throughout the text, such as 'sociel', 'groupe', 'poeple', 'yeas', 'nembers', 'teneegers', and 'same up'. While some numbers and standard descriptors ('male', 'female', 'category') are used adequately to convey simple concepts, the heavy concentration of spelling errors and the limited lexical range prevent the response from achieving a higher band, placing it firmly at a 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as using 'whereas' and 'however'. However, control over grammar and sentence structures is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing throughout, including 'average spending hours in sociel media', 'are the most individuals spending time', 'are less spending time', and 'are the less users'. Punctuation is also problematic, with incorrect spacing before commas and periods. Due to the frequent errors that occasionally impede smooth reading and cause strain, the grammar aligns with a band 4.0.

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