Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
the given figure illustrates the investment of time on the technology by every individuals from various age groups in europe.
overall, it is can be seen from the graph the youngest generation use social media the most compare to old age people.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
The response falls significantly short of the minimum length requirement of 150 words, containing only 42 words. Because of this extreme brevity, the task is only addressed in a very minimal way. The writer attempts to summarize the data by stating that the youngest generation spends the most time on technology, but fails to provide a comprehensive overview, report the main features, or make adequate comparisons across the different age groups and genders shown in the table. To achieve a higher band, the response must meet the word count requirement and present a much fuller, well-developed account of the visual information, covering multiple data points and trends.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The text contains an introduction and a brief overall statement, demonstrating a basic attempt to organize the response. However, due to the extreme shortness of the text, there is no true progression or developed paragraph structure. Cohesive devices are minimal, with 'overall' acting as the only transition. Referencing is attempted with 'the youngest generation', but overall the information is not arranged coherently into a sustained piece of writing. To improve, the writer needs to write multiple developed paragraphs that logically sequence data points, using a wider range of cohesive devices smoothly to guide the reader through the comparisons.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with phrases like 'investment of time', 'the technology', and 'every individuals'. There are noticeable lexical inaccuracies, such as 'every individuals' (combining a singular determiner with a plural noun) and 'old age people' instead of 'older people'. The range is strictly limited and minimally adequate for conveying only the most basic idea. To progress to a higher band, the writer must incorporate a wider variety of precise, less common vocabulary related to data analysis, such as 'proportion', 'demographic', and 'substantially', while avoiding collocation and word-formation errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response features a very limited range of sentence structures, consisting only of simple and slightly flawed complex attempts. There are several grammatical errors, including article misuse ('the given figure', 'the technology'), subject-verb agreement errors ('the youngest generation use' instead of 'uses'), and awkward phrasing ('it is can be seen'). Punctuation is also neglected at the beginning of sentences. To reach a higher band, the writer must demonstrate a mix of complex structures with good control, reducing frequent errors in basic grammar, articles, and verb forms so that meaning is communicated without difficulty.
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