Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given table discussed about average hours spent on the internet by european people of diffrent age group the report divide into three panel one is age(year) snd the other two is gender both male and female.

as it illustrate that the higest number of the age group who are addicted of giving thier time to the intrenet are teenagers on the age of 16-20 the number of male are 19 and female are 18, however the one use lees network are the older genration 51+ male and female uses were less than 3. eventhough the middel age pepole between the age of 21 to 50 their consption of intrenet was in male it is less than 7 and on the women the ratio were less than 5.

on the other side the toddlers between the age of 11-15 thier use of intrent was on the male it were 8 on the female it was 6.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the main peak correctly: people aged 16–20 have the highest figures, at 19 hours for males and 18 for females, and you note that use is lowest among those aged 51+. However, the response gives only a limited account of the table and has no clear, complete overview of the pattern across all age groups. The statement that middle-aged men use the internet for “less than 7” and women for “less than 5” is too broad and obscures the differences between the 21–25, 26–30 and 31–50 groups. Also, the 51+ figures are 2 and 3, rather than both being less than 3. The response is 146 words, below the 150-word minimum; develop the key comparisons and include a concise overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organisation: the response moves from the highest-use age group to older and middle-aged people, then mentions the 11–15 group. Linking expressions such as “however” and “on the other side” show an attempt to connect comparisons. Nevertheless, the ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and the progression is difficult to follow because several age groups are combined in one sentence. The opening describes the table rather than establishing a clear overview, while the final sentence returns to the youngest group without a concluding summary. Use a short introduction, an overview, and one or two paragraphs grouping the age bands logically; make each comparison explicit and use linking words only where their relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “average hours,” “age group,” “gender,” and “consumption,” so the reader can identify the subject. However, the range is basic and several inaccurate or misspelled choices make the report harder to read: “addicted of giving their time” is not an appropriate way to describe hours of internet use, and “ratio” does not accurately describe the figures. Frequent spelling problems, including “diffrent,” “higest,” “thier,” and “intrent,” also reduce clarity. Aim for precise, neutral reporting language such as “spent,” “recorded,” “figure,” and “declined,” and check spelling carefully. Avoid describing the figures as addiction, since the table reports time spent rather than dependence.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences and comparisons, for example the sentence beginning “as it illustrate,” but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently affect clarity. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent (“the table discussed,” “it illustrate,” “the number … are”), and sentence boundaries and punctuation are often missing, creating run-on constructions. Articles and prepositions are also unreliable, as in “on the age of 16-20” and “on the women the ratio were.” Most clauses follow a simple pattern, with little accurate variety in sentence structure. Practise forming clear comparison sentences with a subject and verb—for example, “Men aged 16–20 spent 19 hours online, compared with 18 hours for women”—and check agreement, tense, articles and punctuation.

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