Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Given is the table illustrating the average screen time of people of diffrent age group living in europe. Table also shows diffrences in that among men and women.

Overall, It can be noted that higest internet time is been spent by individuals in late teenage whereas the older people are heaving the lowest screen time among all age group.

Childrens below 15 are recorded having screen time of 8 hours for male and 6 fours of female, The number plunges after 16 as childrenin late teenage or early 20's are heaving the higest screen time which is 19 and 18 respectively for male and female. Citizence aged above 21 in contrast are heaving less then half of that compaid to late teenagers.

Similarity in screen time of both the genders is noated at the age of 26 to 30 where the avrage mobile usage time is about 4 hours, Moreover the decrimet in spending time with internet has decreased with increasng age as citizens justabove the age of 51 are marked to have lowest screen time in both male and female i.e 2 hours and 3 hours respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern accurately: internet use peaks among 16–20-year-olds (19 hours for males and 18 for females) and is lowest among people aged 51+ (2 and 3 hours). You also report the equal figures for ages 26–30 and make relevant gender comparisons. This covers the task well and gives a clear overview. However, some details are imprecise: “Citizens aged above 21” groups together several age bands, although their figures vary, and “less than half” is not true of every group above 21 when compared with the peak. The overview could also state more clearly that males record higher use in most groups, while females are slightly higher in the two oldest groups. These refinements would make the selection and comparison of key features more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs presenting figures and comparisons. The sequence from younger users to older groups is generally understandable, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “in contrast,” and “Moreover” help signal relationships. However, some connections are unclear or mechanical. For example, “The number plunges after 16” is confusing because use rises sharply from ages 11–15 to 16–20, and “Moreover” does not clearly connect the final comparison to the preceding point. The final paragraph also combines the equal figures for ages 26–30 with the decline among older people. Grouping the data more deliberately and using precise references to age bands would improve progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of task-related vocabulary, including “average,” “plunges,” “in contrast,” and “lowest,” and the reader can usually identify the intended comparisons. However, inaccurate word choice, collocation, and spelling are frequent enough to make some phrases difficult to interpret. “Screen time” and “mobile usage time” are not precise equivalents for hours spent on the Internet, while “the decrement in spending time with internet has decreased” is awkward and repetitive. There are also conspicuous spelling errors, including “diffrent,” “higest,” “avrage,” and “increasng.” Aim for a smaller set of accurate expressions such as “Internet use,” “hours spent online,” and “declined with age,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “whereas,” “which,” and “where.” This shows an attempt to vary sentence structure. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “the older people are heaving the lowest screen time” has an incorrect verb form, while “the decrimet in spending time with internet has decreased” has an unclear grammatical structure. The sentence beginning “Childrens below 15 are recorded having…” also needs a more accurate construction, such as “Children aged 11–15 recorded…”. Practise building shorter, controlled comparisons first, then combine them with accurate subordinate clauses and consistent punctuation.

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