Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This chart illustrates the information of European people about their average hours spend on the internet by different age groups.

Overall, all the age groups have different ratio of male and female.

But in the age group of 16 to 20 years the highest hours spend on internet in Europe by this age group and lesser by 51 and above.

Firstly, in the first age group of 11 to 15 years the average hours spend by male on internet are 8 while, female are in less number and spend only 6 hours. However, in the age group of 16 to 20 there is a massive increase in the quantity of male and female, about 18 hours spend by female and 19 hours spend by male on internet in Europe.

In the age group of 21 to 25 years there is a significantly lower decrease in both male and female ratio. Male spend 7 while, female spend only 5 hours on internet.

Furthermore, in the age groups of 26-30 and 31-50 years the proportion of both male and female are almost same. In 26 to 30 age group both spend 4 hours on internet, while in 31 to 50 years male are 3 and female are again 4 hours as in previous age group.

Finally, in the last age group of 51 to above there is decline in the ratio of male and female. There are just 2 male who spend hours on internet, while only 3 female. They are below from all the age groups.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You report the main pattern accurately: the 16–20 group has the highest figures (19 hours for males and 18 for females), while the 51+ group has the lowest (2 and 3). You also include the other age groups and make relevant male–female comparisons. However, the overview is not fully effective: “all the age groups have different ratio” is vague, and the key overall trend—that internet use generally falls after the 16–20 peak—is not clearly stated. Some descriptions are also imprecise, such as calling the figures “proportions” or “quantity” rather than hours. A sharper overview and more precise reporting of the main patterns would make the response more complete and developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that move through the age groups in order. This makes the data relatively easy to follow. Linking expressions such as “Firstly,” “Furthermore,” and “Finally” help signal progression, although their repeated use makes the connections somewhat mechanical. Some references are unclear or repetitive: “They are below from all the age groups” does not clearly identify the figures being compared, and “as in previous age group” is awkwardly attached to the comparison. Grouping the age bands into a clearer rise-to-peak pattern and subsequent decline, and using more precise references, would improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the comparisons, including “average hours,” “age group,” “increase,” and “decline.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are noticeably inaccurate. For example, “different ratio” and “quantity” do not describe the number of hours naturally, while “massive increase” is an imprecise description of the change between age groups. “Spend hours” is also repeated, and “below from all the age groups” is difficult to interpret. Choose precise terms such as “figure,” “hours of internet use,” and “fell” or “declined,” and vary the language without sacrificing accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, errors occur frequently in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction. Examples include “hours spend” instead of “hours spent,” “the highest hours spend” instead of a correctly formed superlative clause, and “there is a significantly lower decrease,” which is structurally awkward. The sentence beginning “There are just 2 male” also has an agreement and plural-form problem. Commas are sometimes placed incorrectly, as in “8 while, female.” Practise accurate comparative sentence patterns, such as “Males spent 8 hours, compared with 6 for females,” before adding more complex clauses.

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